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Willem
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since 1999-11-18
Posts 139
Inverness, FL, USA

0 posted 2000-02-04 09:44 PM


        
AUGUST, 1945

Take this mourning world, o Lord,
into Your tenderly loving, arms,
take the dead and take the dying,
take the maimed, the silently crying,
and forgive us what we did...


Freely translated  from a poem
written by the late Dutch poet
Jacqueline van der Waals, who wrote
it at the end of WW-1. I must say
that the original version addressed
"Peace" as a dove, rather than God.
I felt uncomfortable with that idea,
so I actually rewrote, rather than
translated, it into prayer form,
while fully  retaining, I believe,
the element of  deep compassion in
Jacqueline's  poem.

For those who understand Dutch, the
original  text follows here:

Vrede, spreid uw zachte wieken
over de treurende aarde heen,
over de doden en de gewonden,
over de duizenden snikkende monden
die verbleekt zijn in geween...

Author:   J. v/d Waals

Translator:  Willem




[This message has been edited by Willem (edited 02-04-2000).]

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WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
1 posted 2000-02-04 10:13 PM


Well I'm glad you shared that and translated it for us! I sure wouldn't have been able to read it other wise.  It's right to the point!

 <*\\\><

When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
2 posted 2000-02-04 10:56 PM


Dear Willem: This is so sad, but beautiful. The message of course is the senselessness of war.
Thank you Willem for being so gracious in your reply to my poem. I would be honored if you would send my poems to your daughter. My oldest son is also a teacher. thank you, ellie

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2000-02-05 10:06 AM


Thank goodness for poets who find beauty and truth in other cultures and languages and have the ability to translate.  Thank you.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA
4 posted 2000-02-05 10:00 PM


Thank you for sharing this.  So often I ask why is land considered more valuable than souls.  So many wars are over pieces of land and it seems so senseless to me to sacrifice so many lives for a little more land.
dovesongs
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 102
Michigan
5 posted 2000-02-06 09:30 PM


Willem,
What a touching poem.  Thank you for sharing.
If only the world would learn that  politics, religion, land, race and any number of other things just aren't worth fighting over.  The same can be said in our own homes.  In the heat of anger we maim and cripple with our words.  I shall copy this and keep it to remind me daily.  
I would also like to thank you for taking the time to comment and critique my poetry.  

Willem
Member
since 1999-11-18
Posts 139
Inverness, FL, USA
6 posted 2000-02-08 11:39 PM


To all you dear friends who wrote such nice and encouraging words about this poem from the beloved Dutch poetess, Jacqueline VanderWaals, and my English interpretation of it, thank you so much!  Jacqueline would have been very happy to read all this. Well, maybe she does...

Willem  

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