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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
At The Gate Guns, Rockets, and manifestos of death of all these things you ain't seen nothin' yet The day shall come when the sky blazes in red earthquakes rumble with massive storms overhead To the murders, thieves, and adulters alike When he comes on that day you'll be far from alright At his feet judgements forever, ignorant man thinks passiage is due He'll look down with tears and say "depart from me, i never knew you" And on this day all heaven filled with sadness For it has lost uncountable souls to this world of madness I say to you carefull not to possess lust, greed, dishonor, or hate Cause on this one day, it'll be you answering at the gate ---Written by:Hoppy 9-9-99 NEW POETRY FORUM NOW OPEN "If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity." SUBMIT YOUR POETRY HERE, AWSOME PAGE. NEW POETRY FORUM ADDED Don't look... you might see. Don't listen... you might hear. Don't think... you might learn. Don't walk... you might stumble. Don't run... you might fall. Don't make a decision... you might be wrong. Don't live...you might die. THE PAGE OF PURE POETIC EXPRESSION!! |
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Vincent Spaulding Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 59 |
Powerful message that folks too often ignore today. But it contains several misspellings, and I believe that you could make the lines tighter. Have someone else read it to you, and you'll hear the places they stumble on the rhythm. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
WELCOME! Powerful words! Not just the muderers but preachers that decieved also. Though the judgement is a good thing and a bad thing. For those who've overcome, it means reward! |
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Willem Member
since 1999-11-18
Posts 139Inverness, FL, USA |
Hi, Hoppy! I like your apocalyptic poem, ut I won't call it powerful or beautiful, as those words are really overworked on forums like this one. It's very descriptive and issues a stern warning to those that need it, which means all of us... That additional "poem", telling us not to do all those things should be followed by a lot of smileys, though. Are we supposed not to use our eyes, ears, brains, legs, power of (non-racial) discrimination and will to live? If that were so, God would have constructed robots rather than created Adam and Eve!  Willem |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
thanks for all your responces, i'm gonna try to fix it up a little and post it again later on. but to II Corinthians (not sure which verse) but it states quiet straitforward what will and will not be acceptable to God and what will restrict us from heaven. but what the i'm saying with the poem is not to shrivle up and die but to to follow God's words. He didn't make us robots but in the "free will" given punishment for the wrong desision is death. That's what it's saying, it's your choice, live-or-die (in the eternal sense) NEW POETRY FORUM NOW OPEN "If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity." SUBMIT YOUR POETRY HERE, AWSOME PAGE. NEW POETRY FORUM ADDED Don't look... you might see. Don't listen... you might hear. Don't think... you might learn. Don't walk... you might stumble. Don't run... you might fall. Don't make a decision... you might be wrong. Don't live...you might die. THE PAGE OF PURE POETIC EXPRESSION!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
strong messages in this poem, and thanks for the referal to the new poerty forum, I'll have to give it a look. take care janet marie Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding- remain the most beautiful words ever heard. Janet Marie |
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Willem Member
since 1999-11-18
Posts 139Inverness, FL, USA |
To what you said in your explanatory e-mail I can only say, "Amen!" As you may have noticed, I wrote replies already to two posts in your new forum, and will send in one of my own poems soon. Willem |
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