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besttpoet
New Member
since 1999-12-30
Posts 6


0 posted 1999-12-30 01:45 AM


A love with God can bring much strife
But he loves me a lot I know
Whenever I'm feeling low
he just goes to show
Ghetto life can be a blessing
I love eatin dressing
Without God there would be no Thanksgiving
because people wouldn'tbe alive to find
America
Which is the hoem of mah gehtto
God's love is like
beautiful and ncie
his love emracees me
like the heat in my
fine fine low rida
\gOD just goes to show
that without him our lives could be devious

© Copyright 1999 besttpoet - All Rights Reserved
deleeme
Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
1 posted 1999-12-30 08:41 AM


Your perspective and life experiences are obviously different from my own but I believe we still come to the same conclusions=The life lived for God is not the easiest-but that's because God is seeking to do something with it/Without God,
we would not exist-living apart from God we
tend to the baser things of life/God's love can fill us and help us overcome our life's circumstances--You expressed these truth in a different way-but to them I can say to you Amen Friend!

Nate Dogg
Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
2 posted 1999-12-30 12:09 PM


Hey besttpoet, I have on question for you, do you like rap music? Well I do and your poem seem more like rap lyrics to me. However, rap lyrics and poems are arrnaged in similar formations so, despite your agressiveness, these could still pass for poetry. However, your poetry needs work though. But once you start writing more poems, you'll get better, just like I did.
I'm out so peace, my fellow poet!

 Nathan

sandgrain
Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA
3 posted 2000-01-01 04:40 PM


An ad showing a child on Santa's knee read, "Jesus loves you whether you were naughty or nice", came to mind as I read your poem.  Jesus was born in a barn so none would think their home wasn't understood by Him.  Love makes a home, where ever and whatever its size or construction.
WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
4 posted 2000-01-01 10:38 PM


Welcome!!  And I agree with what you've written!  Without God, we have nothing!!
He came in with nothing, no home, nothing. If he can do it we can also...no one said it was easy for sure, but His blessings are what count!  God Bless You!

 <*\\\><
Where there is faith,
there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

Hallmark



besttpoet
New Member
since 1999-12-30
Posts 6

6 posted 2000-01-02 11:51 PM


I'm just 'spressin myself, what's so wrong with that Midnight? You need to back on up and let a brotha breathe. You'd like dressing too if you loved God. Go on with yo strife, it's nothing to me.
Shirleeah Storey
Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 68
Delaware
7 posted 2000-01-03 09:32 AM


You keep expressing yourself in the way that God wants you to.  Mind not the faces or voices of the people. I understand you when you refer to the dressing.  It's not just pertaining to the edible dressing we stuff in Turkey's. It's pertaining to the new dressing we receive from God as we offer up to him upon entering his gates with Thanksgiving.  Stay encouraged!!!
Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

9 posted 2000-01-03 04:16 PM


I personally think the best way to handle a reply to a poem(unless posted in CA, where you know the person is specifically asking for a critique) is to find what you like in it...the message, etc. If there is something that you would like to say that is critical in nature, I personally would send a private email to the poet so as not to unduly embarass them (do unto others as you would have done unto you), but that's just my opinion, so you can take it or leave it.   (no comment necessary!)

 Denise


besttpoet
New Member
since 1999-12-30
Posts 6

10 posted 2000-01-03 11:49 PM


Look here Midnight, howa you gonna tell me my poems don't make sense, (oops, in yo words, "snese"), when you start your reply with "best, first of all..." If you think I need so much work, then why don't you suggest something instead of trying to embarass someone to glorify yoself. Maybe my works are too much fo you to handle, obviously you don't see my symobolism as others do. Back on up and get to steppin cuz no one here is gonna listen to what you got to say. Props to all those who support me in my quest to become a betta poet. Obviously you neva heard of judge not lest ye be judged. Trick.
Midnight
Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 28

11 posted 2000-01-04 11:41 PM


**sigh**
best, I was referring to you, in my first addressing of you, not commenting on the poem. Anyway, I'm sorry you took my criticism so badly. I wasn't trying to glorify myself- I was only trying to help you in your quest to become a better poet. If you do wish to read my poetry, and judge it yourself, please email me. I will from now on, keep criticsims out of this forum, I am now sorry I ever brought it up. I never meant to disrespect you or anyone else here, nor did I want to evoke such anger in the author.

-Truce?

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