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Death's Obeisance (Spenserian Sonnet)

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jbouder
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0 posted 12-14-1999 06:00 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for jbouder

The Shrouded Horror poised with scythe to mow
Green shoots, ripe wheat, and weathered stalks alike,
Grim gritted teeth and hollow eyes aglow
With pride, It paused to survey It's great Reich.
The dauntless Judge considered its next strike,
A hiss escaped the rictus of It's grin,
When stabbing fear sharp as a guardsman's pike
Pierced skin and bone and icy heart within.
Black clouds and tolling, rolling thunder's din
Forced hateful eyes, against their will, to see
That White Cloaked Victor's glorious rule begin:
The Vicar pinned against a Roman Tree.
Now tattered shroud and broken scythe remain,
Obeisance paid in honor of His Reign


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I want to be mindful of the rules regarding multiple posts but I thought some of you might like what I posted in Critical Analysis.  No offense will be taken if the moderators must remove this post.



 Jim

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Denise
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Wow! This is great! Well done!  

 Denise


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Very well done and thank you for sharing this with us. I look at CA as a learning tool. I would consider this double posted if you had it in Open or another forum. Thank you again.

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3 posted 12-15-1999 07:56 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

Exquisite word usage...powerful! Thank you!!
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4 posted 12-18-1999 09:39 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Very good!

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Very vivid description, and I think that's what I love most about this poem.  It's neat how strict formatting (such as Spenser's sonnet format) sometimes forces us to come up with new & more creative ways of describing things.  Not to rob you of due credit at all...

Overall this is flawless... very well written.

Brian

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