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He Finally Won !

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Rebecca
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since 12-23-1999
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0 posted 12-25-1999 04:31 PM       View Profile for Rebecca   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rebecca

Hello.  This is the first poem that I am posting here, although I have enjoyed reading many poems posted.  This poem was written after a friend of mine committed suicide.  This came only a few weeks after another friend had done the same thing.  The poem itself is a "conversation" between me and my best friend - we've gone through this together too many times.


He Finally Won !

Did you hear the news ?
It really was him -
You remember him, don't you ?
Yes, it was her brother.
She's gonna be okay, though -
What about you ?
Yes, I'll be fine.
Are you gonna go ?
Maybe we should -
She'll need us there.
He was such a nice guy -
So young, though.
Too young.
We'll get through this -
Just like last time.
We will all pull together.
It'll be alright.
I'll pick you up at noon -
Again...

© Copyright 1999 Rebecca - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 12-25-1999 04:54 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Rebecca - welcome.
I think that is a dreadful conversation you have had to have - but I'm glad you have your best friend to go through this with.
And it is an interesting technique writing this as a poem - I like it.

Again - welcome to Passions.

Hugs.
K

 ...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara
Denise
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2 posted 12-25-1999 07:56 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very sad, indeed. Nobody wins when this happens. So final and so heartbreaking. You have expressed your feelings well in this, Rebecca. Welcome to Passions. I know you'll love it here.

 Denise


Dark Angel
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3 posted 12-25-1999 08:01 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

This is very sad Rebecca, but as Severn said I am glad that you have your Best Friend by your side.
Welcome to passions.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


RainbowGirl
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since 07-31-99
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4 posted 12-25-1999 09:04 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Rebecca: So poignant...big hugs sweetheart

 Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn.

Rebecca
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since 12-23-1999
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5 posted 12-25-1999 09:45 PM       View Profile for Rebecca   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rebecca

thank you all - yes, it was a very hard thing to have to go through and having my best friend was a big help.  i'd never have made it through without her.

thank you - and i'm sure i WILL like it here.
littleJas
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since 12-22-1999
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6 posted 12-26-1999 08:23 AM       View Profile for littleJas   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littleJas

Very sad poem, I too have felt this kind of pain , im glad you had someone to help you get through this awfull time , welcome

Beri
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since 11-25-1999
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7 posted 12-26-1999 11:49 AM       View Profile for Beri   Email Beri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beri

Welcome to passions Rebecca!
I loved this piece, I loved your style here, good thinking.  It is so sad a topic though and like it has already been said, i am glad you had your best friend with you during this.  Best friends are truly a gift from God.  I'll be looking for more of your work!  

 If you love something, set it free, if it comes back to you, its meant to be...

hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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Glen Hope, PA USA


8 posted 12-26-1999 01:15 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

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