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John Yaws
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0 posted 12-24-1999 03:45 AM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

Melancholy? Introspective?
Yes, I guess it’s true....
A thinker? Yes, I make the claim
A poet? Yes, that too.
I wonder why I cannot delve-
And find the inner man...
A person never conquers that...
He does not understand.
Some people read the lines I write
And say, “Oh, that’s so sweet”.
The very same might tremble
If we should chance to meet.
To see me one might be surprised-
That writing’s to my taste...
And call my manners vulgar,
My talents deem a waste.
It may seem contradictory-
And vulgar unto some-
The very hand which wields the pen
Is expert with the gun.
I try to be respectful,
But I will not play a game-
I’ll deal with you in honesty,
Demand of you the same.
I’ll not insult your honor-
Nor lay a hand on you....
But treat me with the same respect
Or dire results you’ll rue.
I weigh about three hundred pounds
Barefoot, I’m six foot three...
It takes a brave man, or a fool
To pick a fight with me.
Beneath that hard, and calloused shell
There dwells a softer man...
Who loves the wild, and lovely things
I do not understand...
Why we cannot be reconciled-
This other man and I?
It seems instead, that peace can come
But only if one die.
© Copyright 1999 John R. Yaws - All Rights Reserved
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since 12-18-1999
Posts 38

1 posted 12-24-1999 06:30 AM       View Profile for TomS   Email TomS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TomS

Gunslinger, I sure enjoyed this.  There is good in you man.  Keep seeking your heart.  There is truth there.
Elizabeth Santos
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since 11-08-1999
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2 posted 12-24-1999 08:14 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I would not think you vulgar
Rather "earthy" is what I see
And the softer part of you
Is obvious in your poetry
Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
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3 posted 12-25-1999 09:29 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A gentle giant would I see
-I've eyes that look inside
A tender heart's what speaks to me
-It's something you can't hide.  

So if perhaps we'd meet one day
-There's nothing I would fear
The poet's soul that you display
-Is one that I hold dear.


since 11-18-1999
Posts 141
Inverness, FL, USA

4 posted 12-25-1999 10:28 PM       View Profile for Willem   Email Willem   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Willem

The message shows a beautiful
blend of pride and humility, as
befits a real man. The writer
admits of some rough edges, but
that probably makes him even more
attractive to many people.
Formatwise, a well-written piece
of poetry. I found only one minor
flaw, in line 22, where omitting
the "I" would improve meter, IMHO.


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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 12-25-1999 10:45 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Gunslinger, remind me not to cut you off in traffic! But I'll share a seat at the poetry table with you any day.
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