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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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Melancholy? Introspective? Yes, I guess it’s true.... A thinker? Yes, I make the claim A poet? Yes, that too. I wonder why I cannot delve- And find the inner man... A person never conquers that... He does not understand. Some people read the lines I write And say, “Oh, that’s so sweet”. The very same might tremble If we should chance to meet. To see me one might be surprised- That writing’s to my taste... And call my manners vulgar, My talents deem a waste. It may seem contradictory- And vulgar unto some- The very hand which wields the pen Is expert with the gun. I try to be respectful, But I will not play a game- I’ll deal with you in honesty, Demand of you the same. I’ll not insult your honor- Nor lay a hand on you.... But treat me with the same respect Or dire results you’ll rue. I weigh about three hundred pounds Barefoot, I’m six foot three... It takes a brave man, or a fool To pick a fight with me. Beneath that hard, and calloused shell There dwells a softer man... Who loves the wild, and lovely things I do not understand... Why we cannot be reconciled- This other man and I? It seems instead, that peace can come But only if one die. |
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TomS Junior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 32 |
Gunslinger, I sure enjoyed this. There is good in you man. Keep seeking your heart. There is truth there. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Gunslinger, I would not think you vulgar Rather "earthy" is what I see And the softer part of you Is obvious in your poetry Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A gentle giant would I see -I've eyes that look inside A tender heart's what speaks to me -It's something you can't hide. So if perhaps we'd meet one day -There's nothing I would fear The poet's soul that you display -Is one that I hold dear.  Denise |
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Willem Member
since 1999-11-18
Posts 139Inverness, FL, USA |
The message shows a beautiful blend of pride and humility, as befits a real man. The writer admits of some rough edges, but that probably makes him even more attractive to many people. Formatwise, a well-written piece of poetry. I found only one minor flaw, in line 22, where omitting the "I" would improve meter, IMHO. Willem |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Gunslinger, remind me not to cut you off in traffic! But I'll share a seat at the poetry table with you any day. |
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