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hoot_owl_rn
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Falling

Evening shadows begin to fall,
and the sky turns from blue
to orange and red.
Colors reflect off the water,
mirroring the sky,
as the sun sets
on the ocean itself.

Amidst all that beauty,
I fail to notice anything
but the spark in your eyes.
You pull me closer
to the edge of the cliff
so that I may see nature at her finest
and in doing so,
you reach for my hand.

Dont worry,
you smile and say,
I wont let you fall.
Cant you see?
...Im already falling.


"I am nothing special, of this I am sure. I am a common man with common thoughts and I've led a common life. There are no monuments dedicated to me and my name will soon be forgotten, but I've loved another with all my heart and soul, and to me , this has always been enough." ~Nicholas Sparks from The Notebook

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-23-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 12-23-1999 01:12 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot,
Very well put, good writing good poem, I like
*L* Sy
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2 posted 12-23-1999 01:23 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Hootessa

This is terrific.  I like the way you opened this poem by setting the scene, then introduced the situation so cleanly over the top of it, and finally linked in the double meaning of falling.  (I also like the way you show all that skin in your picture... oops).
Andrew Scott
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3 posted 12-23-1999 02:24 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Greetings Lady Hoot. A fine picture you paint with real colors and depth.  Dare I say, one could almost fall into it.
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Hoot what a way to express your feelings. Very well done!

ROFL @ LJ, I had a mouth full of coffee at the moment and almost spit it out from laughing!
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Dovey

Merry Christmas, little one.  May the peace and love of Jesus be with you every moment of your life, especially in this time of celebration.
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Another well written piece Hoot that fits perfectly alongside all the others of yours that Ive read.

Thanks for sharing.
First__Knight
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7 posted 12-23-1999 05:51 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Ruth,  

What you paint upon my heart...I share
here today with all who might look

How you become more lovely each day I
will never know.  But this I do know.  

Should you fall.......Don't be
surprised when I fall too.....or more
so....that you find me there having
fell before you and it is I who breaks
your fall because no greater honor
could I have than to catch this falling
star that you are to me    

Golden Dreams to you Ruth....I am but a
thought away......and a feeling shared


 Share what you are for you are what you share


Dark Angel
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8 posted 12-23-1999 06:16 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Ruth, I too loved this, you set a perfect scene and the ending was fantastic.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Munda
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9 posted 12-23-1999 07:35 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Another great poem Ruth. I hope the hands that catch you bring peace and love. : )

Merry Christmas Ruth. : )
Hugs.

Munda
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Oh so beautiful Hoot! You definitely used all the right colors for this!  

I do believe this is one of my favorites of yours!


 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


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11 posted 12-23-1999 07:57 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Beautiful words and dreams my friend..
Merry Christmas  

 Reach inside your heart, that is the greatest gift you can bestow. Merry Christmas..
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


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Beautiful and well done...but of course!  

 Denise


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Well, Ms. Hoot -
I wondered where my Muse was ...
NOW I KNOW ... told you, didn't I !
This is beautiful ... it's YOU.
Love ~*Marge*~




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hoot_owl_rn
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Thank you everyone, so so much  

Marge...sorry, I don't have your muse, seem to have found my own  

Long John...thank you , and yes, the word falling does indeed have a double meaning.
Glad you liked the picture.

David...Thank you, your words brought a smile to my face  
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Beautiful hoot, great painting and the last lines really got to me.  Happy Holidays!
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Wonderful poem hoot, I loved every word.

samsonheart
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what an ending
wow
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Really MUCH enjoyed

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