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Soul on Ice ( part two & soulful revision)

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Nate Dogg
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0 posted 12-22-1999 06:23 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg


I already have this one in the spiritual section but, I think it fits nicely in here too. I hope you enjoy it. Bear in mind that this poem isn't necessarily about me but, it may be about someone I've known or met. That's my style of poetry. Not only do I write about me, I write about everything that's around me too.

I'm walking on thin ice,
as I continue to pay the price,
for trying to make things right.
I used to rob banks
but, I've stopped.
And God is the only person who get my thanks,
as well as my props
because, everybody else juse labeled me
as a certified thief.
All I wanted to do was to make money
because, I needed it real bad.
The little money that I got from begging was all I had.
In society,
my personality is under heavy scrutiny
because, my soul suffers from severe immorality.
At times, I'm sharp as an ice pick,
with a mind as hard as a brick
but, still not slick as Rick.
Evertyime, I try to squeeze out of a bad cicumstance,
I usually end up with ants in my pants.
I swear to God that if I get another chance,
I would look at the world through a whole different glance.
I would make the changes that needs to be made
and worry less about being paid.
I've realized the consequences of society
and I hate of I the bad notoriety I recieve.
Right now, I feel like an army grenade,
fixing to detonate.
Continuing to pay the price,
for the wrong type of sacrifice,
my soul's on ice.

 Nathan
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Denise
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1 posted 12-22-1999 10:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yep, we do reap what we sow, pay the price, as they say, for the deeds we do. Soul on Ice is a very good depitction of that fact.
Nate, how about part 2 ... Soul on Fire, describing a life after an encounter with God?! I think that would make an excellent companion piece to this one! What ya think?  

 Denise


Nate Dogg
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2 posted 12-23-1999 12:05 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you! That's a great idea!

 Nathan
Seymour Tabin
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Nate,
You have some very good things in the poem,
I enjoyed the read.
Nate Dogg
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4 posted 12-23-1999 01:38 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you Seymour. I'm looking forward to another poem from you.
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