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All I have is you
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All I have is you |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I always think about you Though you're far, My arms are begging, To hold you tight, Love is still there yet, I'm here for you, If you should call me, You believe, I don't mean a single word I say, All I've to take your heart away, I want to make you sure, How much I care, All the boys in town, Have all the luck, I don't have any luck, I'm afaird I might lose you again, I'm falling in love with you, My arms longing to hold you, [This message has been edited by vandana (edited 12-22-1999).] |
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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
You might want to edit the typo's and edit this poem so that it's much more flowing. This has potential. If you do decide to change the poem, e-mail me please, because I don't have too much time to go back over these poems, ya know? --A Little Fairy-- |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Yes...you might want to edit the typo's...it kinda takes away from the poem... Starboards "I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget" |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
That's funny, nobody ever said anything about my typos. What they don't know is, I just don't know how to spell, oh well. The thoughts in this poem are lovely Liz ' |
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