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Poet deVine
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0 posted 12-21-1999 06:36 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poet deVine

Left alone at last my love,
you holding my hand so tight.
The doctor gave his final report,
that I was losing this mortal fight.

I feel my life slipping away;
and see that truth in your eyes.
You watch me with such tenderness
counting all my breathless sighs.

The last few months has made me glad,
to leave this cancerous place.
But the last thing I want to see in this life
is your sweet and smiling face.

With a moan I take my last breath
my eyes tell you it is so
and closing
forever
in this
life
I watch you

let

me


go.


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Local Rebel
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1 posted 12-21-1999 06:42 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Not knowing you I am unsure of the "I" in your work ....

It is hauntingly reminiscent to me.  The struggle to let go is very  vibrant in your work and is very true to life.

Peace

 How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius
JOY 14
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2 posted 12-21-1999 06:44 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

This is sad but also very beautiful.  I especialy liked the ending.  
"I watch you let me go."

 JOY

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 12-21-1999 06:44 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

PoetfeVine,
Good form, good paint,
Very warm, but I didn't faint.
I take it this is just an excellent poem.
*L* sy
RainbowGirl
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4 posted 12-21-1999 06:44 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Oh PDV:

The peacefulness for those in letting go
love they gave in our memories we'll know

HUSG

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...


Poet deVine
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5 posted 12-21-1999 06:45 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Just so you don't think I'm ill...I wrote this to show the last moments of life from a dying woman's perspective.
Local Rebel
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6 posted 12-21-1999 06:48 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

You have then mastered a perspective you do not have.  It is a painful but essential reminder.  

Thankyou
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A real tear-jerker PDV, I’m glad to hear it wasn’t for real.

Another masterful piece. ( Or mistressful if there is such a word and if there isn’t there should be )
Beri
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8 posted 12-21-1999 07:12 PM       View Profile for Beri   Email Beri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beri

"I watch you let me go"
That just struck me as a beautiful way to end such a beautiful, yet sad poem.
It made me think so much of the battle my aunt lost to cancer.  So sad, but you made me see it kind of in her perspective I guess.  Thank you for the deVine.  Again, beautiful...

 If you love something, set it free, if it comes back to you, its meant to be...

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9 posted 12-21-1999 07:37 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

I wrote this long ago as the man who held the hand...

I can't relive
when the last kiss began,
So long ago…
I can't release your hand,
Your fingers tight,
I won't let go…
I could drown in eyes so blue,
Like ice they melt me,
Into you..

And the last dance,
Goes on and on,
And I am in you…
And the last dance,
Is the longest song,
And I am in your…eyes..

Dying blue..
I am drowning in your eyes
Don't save me

Blue is the color of my soul,
It sure looks good in you…
Around the evening glows,
The fusion flows,
I am with you…
I die for you….
to
be
you
I…….. die………. blue

Dying blue..
I am drowning in your eyes.
Don't save me.

Dying blue..
I am drowning in your eyes.
Don't save me.

Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 12-21-1999 07:49 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

PDV,
This was so real.
I just can't figure out who wrote the poem.

Very well written, indeed.
Liz
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11 posted 12-21-1999 08:16 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Such beautiful insight....What a special piece Poet...

"I watch you let me go"
                                                                               So beautifully executed.....  

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


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This is a tear jerker  
Denise
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13 posted 12-21-1999 10:01 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is superb, Sharon. Very well done and from such a unique perspective!

 Denise


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14 posted 12-21-1999 10:02 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

Such feeling this piece evokes! Thanks for another great one.
WhtDove
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15 posted 12-21-1999 10:06 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

From that perspective you've done a wonderful job! Loved it!
Dolphins3
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16 posted 12-21-1999 10:09 PM       View Profile for Dolphins3   Email Dolphins3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dolphins3

Poet, This is a very emotional piece. I really enjoyed it.  
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this...

aches
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18 posted 01-24-2006 11:31 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Dusting off shelves in here, I found this and it reminded me of when Willow left, those were her exact words, "Now let me go."  Death is such a selfish time isn't it?  You did it justice Sharon.
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19 posted 11-12-2007 07:14 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Repost repost, its probably better this time

ARCTIC WIND
 
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