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Ode to Death (revised)
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Ode to Death (revised) |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Leafless trees hang low, over cold and silent grave, Dark skies above foreboding, not yet a snowflake shed, Winter hath descended, soon will the land enslave, In grip of icy tentacle, the touch of recent dead. My faith and trust are swept like straws, from grasp by tempest's woe, As I devour the bitter ash, of soul's despair of haunting sorrow, Dark and gloomy mausoleum, erected by death's loathsome lust, Man's unperverted Ithuriel mask, conventions are by evil crushed. Shrouded chambers of lifeless haunts, recoil as shadows bleed, Clouds of terror reach fingers out, dark spirits stalk; hell hath decreed. With mournful soul and quivering limbs, touch on my lifeless breath, Unrelenting desolation, stand face to face with sin and death. A miser's life devoid of warmth, if not for heat of anger, Grievers haste last requiem, in quest of life's departure, Affections cause not mourner's grief, for hate creates their languor, For in his life bred discontent, now silent wrath incur. Aye, the miser lay in final slumber, beneath a rich man's stone, But in the ground as poor shall lie, for wealth shan't pierce the shroud, As man doth live, so shall he perish, shall live and die alone, As pauper to the worms doth go, beneath foreboding cloud. Heed the death knell of the miser, as passes through time's portal, Lest one betakes themselves too great, in history, all are mortal. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 12-21-1999).] |
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Coegwyr Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
Some of you poets are just a little less mortal than the rest of us. Well written Mike |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Mike: I don't know about mortal but I'm that disorganised I'd come back in the wrong timeframe wearing a mini...ooops Seriously: We are only what we are! HUGS Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Uh Huh, not too many can leave me at a loss for words - you've just done it. History does show man to be "mortal" but words can surely be immortal - have to agree with Coegwyr,t here. Excellent woek. Michael |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, Impressed, Liked the read very much. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Yo Mike, I remember this from the first time around... thought it was great then... ditto now. Can't comment on any of the changes as I'm not sure where they were made, but all the same... a fine effort. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Awesome... My favorite line is: quote: .... but you knew that, of course. Such AdeptNess at syntax will always catch my attention....  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very well written, Mike It's a little eerie after just reading that werewolf poem! Liz |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I am flattered by the comments. Thank you. Nan, you have touched within the inner sanctum of the chambers... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is excellent, Mike, sobering and with a fantastic message. Well done! Denise |
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