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Michael
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0 posted 12-21-1999 08:28 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

UTOPIA

Sunrise on the desert.
Golden sands, a red-orange sky.
A shadow cast in darkness-
On the winds subtle cry.
Crossing a painted picture,
A seemingly endless cage.
Facing another day alone,
The cowboy turns the page.

He rides towards the horizon,
Where each night the sunsets hide.
Black Stetson hat, calloused hands,
On the white horse he calls Pride.
A face rough and unshaven,
Kabar knife, faded Levi's.
Never a smile, never a frown,
Just wild, blue staring eyes,

And the desert winds blow harsh,
Dust kicking up in his sight..
But steady on his march,
The man presses on through the plight.
Perseverance leads the way,
On the lonely, sometimes dreadful quest.
Indeed a good man some would say,
But I'd say he's the best.

And the dream seems within reach now,
The tiresome journey nearing its end.
He can see it in the distance,
As the storm seems to suspend.
A land where emotions flourish-
In grandiose euphoria.
A land where pain eases and hearts nourish,
A land he calls "Utopia".

Yes determination, will, and guts,
His three best friends behooved-
Have led him to the crossroads-
Where nothing remains to be proved.
The desert lies behind him,
Prosperity just ahead on the plain.
He slows up just a moment,
Gently pulling back the reign.

He tips his hat without looking back-
To those he touched on this parade.
He holds his head high, lets out a sigh,
Watching a brilliant sunset fade.
And night comes on the wings of angels,
Calling a billion stars to his side.
Carrying him away to his "Utopia",
The cowboy's final ride.


Michael Anderson

2/93 (For my Father)



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Poet deVine
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1 posted 12-21-1999 08:36 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

It's a good thing I can type without looking at the keyboard, because my eyes seem to be watering at the moment! This is one of your best! A wonderful tribute to your father.. the picture was painted so vividly with your words that I could see him on that horse, tipping his hat! Thank you for sharing this with us!  
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 12-21-1999 09:56 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Michael,
A grand poem one of your best.
I've read it twice can't lay it to rest.
Bravo, my friend.
RSEvans
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3 posted 12-21-1999 10:29 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

I agree with Sy...one of your best, Michael.
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4 posted 12-21-1999 10:49 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

...crying here, Michael. What a lovely, touching tribute. I wish I had written this for my Dad. (but I can pretend it's for my Dad, too, right?!) I agree, I think this is one of your best yet!  

 Denise


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5 posted 12-21-1999 11:40 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

How very beautiful  
Michael
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6 posted 12-21-1999 03:26 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Thank you all for the compliments.  I'm glad you all felt the sincerity of this one.

Denise, of course you can pretend it's for your father too.     


Michael
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7 posted 12-21-1999 04:25 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Raw, fabulous. Love this!
A bleeding poem - as I like to call such - the ones with truth seeping out over the edges of image.

K

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8 posted 12-21-1999 04:28 PM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

One of your very best. I can feel the love here. Beautiful.  

 B Gravitt


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9 posted 12-21-1999 06:39 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Its very good and descriptive too!
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10 posted 12-21-1999 06:47 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

yes, you have been doing some incredible writing lately and this is one of them...great poem.....hugs ...  
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11 posted 12-21-1999 08:42 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Michael this poem is SO good...heartfelt, beautiful, and filled with emotion. You've written a wonderful tribute to your father. The love really comes through in your writing  



It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain




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12 posted 12-21-1999 08:48 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

A horse that sometimes rides us too...

Well said friend.

Adieu all... time for me to fly

 How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius
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13 posted 12-21-1999 09:15 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I, too, can see your father smiling, tipping his hat, and riding off to his Utopia. To be able to project an image like that is brilliant writing.Congrats, Michael.
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14 posted 12-21-1999 09:21 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Some people write, some people express themselves, a very select few are able to share of their innermost self with their writings.  You are in the select few.
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You've outdone yourself, my friend... and that's no small chore...
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I don't know what I can say that hasn't been said already Michael. I agree with them all. You've really touched me with the beauty of this piece.



 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
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17 posted 12-21-1999 10:18 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Truly a vivid picture you've given us! Excellent writing Michael!
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18 posted 12-21-1999 11:10 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

Simply beautiful.  I agree with every rave review you've received.
Michael
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19 posted 12-22-1999 01:55 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Thank you all, once more.  I am sure my father would be tipping his hat to you all also.

Local Rebel, indeed, that horse rides us sometimes, into the ground if we allow it.

Severn, "bleeding" is a most accurate description.  I wrote this the day after my father passed in 1993 - truly, I was bleeding inside.  TY


Michael

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I can't add much to the comments of others, except to say that I think this is very beautiful.

 --A Little Fairy--
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21 posted 12-22-1999 03:43 PM       View Profile for starboards   Email starboards   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for starboards

Yes, very beautiful michael, as always...

Ashley

 
"I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget"
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22 posted 12-22-1999 05:21 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh wow...I was reading this, and at first thought you had written it about you.....I could see you on the horse....But as I read on, it didn't seem to "fit" you....what a pleasant surprise to find out it was for your dad.  Absolutely breathtaking sir....and what a beautiful poem for such a wonderfully powerful man, as you have described him.  It's as if I can see him....and the look of accomplishment in his eyes as he tips his hat.  I know he's proud of you & Mikey too for following in his trail.  I applaude you mi-Lord for this masterpiece.  ***clapping !!  

 - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF


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23 posted 12-17-2001 06:34 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I never replied to this piece, but I've never forgotten it either. I love it.  

God bless America, my home sweet home.

 
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