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Is this the end?

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Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


0 posted 12-20-1999 06:37 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

I'm lying in critical condition in this hopital bed,
with three bullets in my head.
The pain is searing through my brain,
causing me to cry out to the Lord in vain.
I told the Lord that if he plans to take me,
then let me leave quietly.
I never thought that I would be on
the recieving end,
of a bullet from my best friend.
We let money and women come in between us.
Therefore, there wasn't much trust between us.
Obviously, my friend needs to see a psychiatrist.
I never thought that he was like this.
He was a angel in disguise,
that unvieled his true identity right before my own eyes.
This is the result of all those years he smoked crack.
I know he wishes that he could have those years back.
All that crack, flipped his brain like an acrobat
and now he's trapped like Daniel was in the lion's den.
Because of him, my life is descending
and is close to an ending.
I belive that my life is coming to an end
and my afterlife is fixing to begin.
Before I go, I would like to thank everybody
who was positive and all the ones that cared and loved me.
I hope you all stay strong,
reach mountain peaks, and hold on.
At my last breath, I closed my eyes and told the world my final goodbye.


 Nathan
© Copyright 1999 Nate Dogg - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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since 07-07-99
Posts 32119
Tamarac Fla


1 posted 12-20-1999 06:46 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Nate Dogg,
I would take this poem with you as an introduction into the hall of past poets.
It's a sure passport and you can't miss.
Lots of luck, enjoyed the poem.
Iloveit
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since 09-02-99
Posts 1168
NM


2 posted 12-20-1999 06:48 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

wow what a story.....sad too......
Nate Dogg
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since 11-15-1999
Posts 1691
Georgia, Fulton


3 posted 12-20-1999 06:57 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Thank you Seymour and lloveit! I appreciate every comment that is sent my way.

 Nathan
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


4 posted 12-20-1999 07:23 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

A very sad tale...I am looking forward to more, you speak from life experiences that few of us here have had to deal with.
Elizabeth Santos
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since 11-08-1999
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Pennsylvania


5 posted 12-20-1999 07:33 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Very imaginative!
I liked it!
Liz
caroline
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since 08-16-99
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6 posted 12-20-1999 07:48 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Chilling and sad...but you pen powerful stuff. Keep it up  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Femme's Father
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since 10-30-1999
Posts 68
Carrollton, TX, USA


7 posted 12-20-1999 08:11 PM       View Profile for Femme's Father   Email Femme's Father   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Femme's Father

You had me going thinking this story was true til I got to the end and noticed it would have been the end of you.  Very imaginative story.

 A man's heart often cannot see the light - because of the darkness of it's own motives.... - James David
Denise
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since 08-22-99
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8 posted 12-20-1999 09:55 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

It's so sad that this situation is all too common anymore. God help us. You have captured the pain from a very unique point of view...they dying victim. This is very good Nate.

 Denise


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