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mc
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since 11-16-1999
Posts 67
México


0 posted 12-20-1999 02:07 PM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

Many nights at ease
bring the joy of  dreams
that somehow have deceit
the importance in believes

I dream of you
(or more likely I bring you into them)
to capture the essence of once upon
to rest you in my glorious tomb

So, yes I've come insane
but delirious in an armonic state
where there's an empty shake
starting to tremble in grace

How can anyone blame me
for the things I do
or the things not knowing I don't do
for there's so much at hand
than just to go and grab.

Go on and dream away
come near or get away
while there's some reason
beneath my veins

  While light and day
  are fresh and out!!




 mcestrada
© Copyright 1999 Maricarmen Estrada Elosúa - All Rights Reserved
starboards
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since 10-14-1999
Posts 469
longwood, florida


1 posted 12-20-1999 02:19 PM       View Profile for starboards   Email starboards   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for starboards

I liked the way that you worded this poem...shows lots of emotion...great job!

Starboards

 
"I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget"
mc
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Posts 67
México


2 posted 12-20-1999 04:18 PM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

Thanks Star, I sure enjoyed writing this one as my fingers ran through the computer not exactly knowing what they wrote...

 mcestrada
samsonheart
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since 12-20-1999
Posts 72
Missouri rez.


3 posted 12-20-1999 06:01 PM       View Profile for samsonheart   Email samsonheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for samsonheart

mc, i thought this was an excellent piece. you have a wonderful gift.

samsonheart
Severn
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4 posted 12-20-1999 06:31 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Mari, this is beautiful.
Very unusual and delicate.

I like it much!

Hugs, K.  
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


5 posted 12-20-1999 07:28 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

This is an interesting piece of poetry, much deeper than it appears  
mc
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México


6 posted 12-21-1999 04:54 PM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

Thanks for your kind words you all!!
I really appreciate it!!!

 mcestrada
 
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