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Was It I

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Mark R.
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0 posted 12-20-1999 01:11 PM       View Profile for Mark R.   Email Mark R.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mark R.

Please tell me what it is I've done to you,
To make you say, "I quit, we're thru!".
Was it I who caused the mistiness in your eyes,
The reason for all your late night cries.

If it was, then I apologize for everything I've put you through,
I acted foolishly;as if I didn't have a clue.
I've always meant my intentions to be good,
To be able to love you as only a husband could.

Unfortunately, our expectations were too much to live up to,
So I sit here asking, "What else can I do?".
Please don't read this thinking that I'm weak,
For it's not your sympathy that I seek.

I just ask that you look at me, as you once did before,
As the man you once fell in love with;no less and no more.
Take me into your arms again,
If not as your lover, then please just as a friend.

All I want is to prove to you,
That living a life without you, I could never do.
So indulge me with an answer;"Is it true?",
That it was I who made you say, "I quit, we're thru!".
© Copyright 1999 Mark R. - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 12-20-1999 01:28 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Mark R.,
Elegant, I'm sure you'll get a good response.
Enjoyed the read.
A Romantic Heart
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2 posted 12-20-1999 02:14 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Mark this brought back alot of memories to me, so many times words hurt and leave scars across your heart. Maybe if I had some comfort when I cried or any empathy, the hurt would have healed, but I know that if He would have written a poem like this and showed it to me...then I would have forgave him and healed faster.  

I enjoyed your poem!


[This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (edited 12-20-1999).]
starboards
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3 posted 12-20-1999 02:17 PM       View Profile for starboards   Email starboards   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for starboards

I only wish that my x would have reacted just as you did...but he hasnt and i think he never will...but i'm glad that you have the guts to realize that you might have done wrong...great job!

 
"I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget"
Dolphins3
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4 posted 12-20-1999 02:41 PM       View Profile for Dolphins3   Email Dolphins3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dolphins3

Mark, I recieved a poem like this not to long ago. I hope you have shared this with her. Wishing you all the best. *hugs*  
Mark R.
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5 posted 12-20-1999 03:19 PM       View Profile for Mark R.   Email Mark R.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark R.

Thank you all for your kind words.  It has been very hard for me and my ex these past few months, thankfully, poetry has become my release.  
  Romantic heart, and all who responded, keep on living for those things that make you truly happy.  Unless you fulfill these needs you'll never be really happy.  Remember, never, never take what you have for granted.  
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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6 posted 12-20-1999 07:06 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

This is sad...you pain rings through loud and clear
Denise
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7 posted 12-20-1999 09:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very sad, touching poem.

 Denise


Severn
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8 posted 12-20-1999 09:50 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Very sad indeed.
 
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