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My Sun
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My Sun |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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My Sun ~First Knight~ She came into my life, while living out my days. So beautiful I saw her, I can not count the ways. I watched her every move, Every word she ever spoke. She held my every wish, Feelings she provoked. She didn't even know me, I could not make a sound. Amazed at her beauty, My true love I have found. I saw her beauty well, She gave only from the heart. Her soft and tender touch, My love will not depart. Days passed by so quickly, As time was not the same. Hours seemed like moments Into my life she came. Words she spoke to me, Things I longed to hear, Gentle words she spoke, "What's your name sweet dear?" My days are heaven filled now, She's my life, my soul, my air. She shares with me her day, My heart trapped in her snare. Share what you are for you are what you share |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Breathtaking words you have here, FKnight.  K |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Your glowing from the suns rays reflecting off your beautifully written words. I am sure your intended recipient of this poem will be glowing in happiness as well. I really enjoyed, thanks for sharing. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Lovely verse Sir Knight. You have to be careful when making someone your sun and your life. that comes with time and experience. These feelings are wonderful but be careful about letting them consume you. Just a skeptic's point of view...lol |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful poem!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
What a beautiful poem! Make any heart melt! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
(sigh)...Very romantic...so beautiful.. Liked this much Sir... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
David...this is a beautiful poem, very heartfelt and touching. I am really at a loss for words. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Knight: This brings a smile to my face.. HUGS Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Nice poem First Knight! I liked the last line. Nathan |
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samsonheart Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 72Missouri rez. |
First Knight, I really enjoyed this poem and you expressed your feelings with elegance. samsonheart |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
First Knight I hope this poem is true! I assume it is. If so, it's a beautiful love. Congratulations. Many happy days ahead! Liz |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
"Hours seemed like moments" I loved this line. I know well the feeling of time being suspended. Amazing isn't it? Beautiful poem! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
David, I don't feel my above post did your poem justice, so I had to reply again. In addition, I have also responded with a posted poem of my own called "Please Remember." Hugs Ruth He came into my world A light in midst of dark His warm and caring soul Started a fine spark I watched his kind relpies His words in poetry And very soon I realized He was writing them to me It frightened me at first His emotions felt so strong I felt I barely knew him We hadn't talked for long But I promise I will try To keep an open mind Perhaps someday in him My true love I will find |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Really enjoyed your writing...all I can say is amen to all foresaid comments. |
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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
Beautiful poem. I wish I could be so lucky to have a person think of me like this. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
A romantic and beautiful piece, I could tell it was written from your heart! "Unto every life, A little love must fall!" |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
My computer is crashed so it has been far to long in replys. I wish to thank you all for the wonderful comments that each of you have left here for me. If I thank each of you this post would be so long that it would need more server space......hehe Ruth being special I say to you, I will never be anything less than what you see.......nor will I be anything more without your full and given time of choice. I posted a reply to your poem "Please Remember" It was a lovely poem< !signature--> Share what you are for you are what you share [This message has been edited by First__Knight (edited 12-21-1999).] |
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