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A walk in the park

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mc
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0 posted 12-20-1999 02:03 AM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

A walk through the park
to meet you there in a blank
where there's an infinite song
only heard in my ears.

To see your face in a blink
to watch your body dance in trance
to jump to the moon
and find you there with a smile

To shine above all
to glitter with no gold
to see that smirk in your eye
remembering distance is in our mind.

To close my defense system
to allow become one in a touch
to find us in a glimpse
to glide in our park.

A walk through the park
no one knows about
to see the image of you
to meet the importance of us.




 mcestrada
© Copyright 1999 Maricarmen Estrada Elosúa - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 11-08-1999
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1 posted 12-20-1999 02:07 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

WOW! This is wonderful!
Very well written, indeed!
Liz
mc
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2 posted 12-20-1999 02:12 AM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

Thank you LIZ, I'm sure glad you liked it!!!
Severn
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3 posted 12-20-1999 03:17 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Mari my friend, I love this!
I love the word usage in here - 'glimpse, blink, blank'...wonderful

AND SO NICE TO SEE YOU POSTING AGAIN!!

Hugs and stuff.

K
mc
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4 posted 12-20-1999 03:25 AM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

Thank you my dear K, It's NICE to be back...

 mcestrada
Seaangel
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5 posted 12-20-1999 03:55 AM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

hi, mc, lovely poem! I look forward to more.
First__Knight
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6 posted 12-20-1999 03:59 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Very moving.....I like the line.."Importance of us."  First read of your work.....and I will look for more  

 Share what you are for you are what you share


mc
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7 posted 12-20-1999 12:42 PM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

Thank you Sea and First K., I sure hope to post some more, your opinion encourages me.

 mcestrada
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 12-20-1999 12:57 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

mc,
Tender is the word,
that's the one I heard.
Enjoyed.
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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9 posted 12-20-1999 06:59 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I like this one...it speaks to me in it's simplicity
 
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