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First Try at Acrostics

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 12-19-1999 07:09 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos


Was trying to make every other line rhyme also, which I don't usually do. I admire those who do this with such ease.


First Try at Acrostics

First try is always the most difficult
In any new and serious endeavor
Regardless the end that you exult
Sometimes it's a little hard to weather
Those who tell you to just dive in
Are those who never tried themselves
That longing which you have within
This is the force that makes you delve
Even God took time to think
Making man was complicated
Putting woman next to him
This has been quite under-rated

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-19-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 12-19-1999 07:14 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Love that ending my friend!!!

hehe.

Well done! From someone who has only done two (and you saw one) I applaud you!

K
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Applauds!!! Must be nice to master something in your first attempt  
You did well Elizabeth  
Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 12-19-1999 07:55 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thank you, girls
I take a bow
One more lesson learned in the Passions school of poetry.
I'll try to make it better next time
Liz
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4 posted 12-19-1999 08:58 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

First attempt huh, I never would have guessed that!....I, like Severn loved the ending... Well done!!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
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5 posted 12-19-1999 10:04 AM       View Profile for M.Marceau   Email M.Marceau   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for M.Marceau

!!!

Doc here,
Allow me to translate, I believe what my friend is trying to say is...

Never would have thought
It to be your first
Congratulations E. Santos
Eloquent your verse

Once you've tried this form
Nothing's in your way
Each will be as good I'm sure
(you'd not have it another way)


 Hands clapping
Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 12-19-1999 10:39 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Pepper, Thanks, sweetie

Doc

Thank you, my acrostics friend
How wonderfully you do wend
Acostics verse with utter grace
No one would attempt outpace
Kind of makes me emulate
So sharp a poet to imitate

Liz


[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-19-1999).]
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 12-19-1999 10:51 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, my friend -

Very nicely done.
By golly, I think you've got it !

Said with grace.
Done with ease.
An acrostic from you,
does surely please.

~*Marge*~




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WhtDove
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8 posted 12-19-1999 11:27 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well a job well done it is! Very good!
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 12-19-1999 01:04 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thank you Marge and WhtDove,
I'm learning!
Liz
Michael
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10 posted 12-19-1999 01:44 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

A very good first attempt, Elizabeth.  I hope you will endeavor further into this realm.  


Michael
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11 posted 12-19-1999 02:10 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Good work, Elizabeth. You only faltered on the rhyme once and the acrostic was excellent. Let's see some more!
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12 posted 12-19-1999 02:32 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth, You did it swell,
But then you do everything well.
You filled the order the first time out
Not only well, but with lots of clout.
Love ya,
Sy
Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 12-19-1999 03:35 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Michael and Balladeer,
Compliments from the Experts, humbly received
Thank you

Sy,
Thank you for describing my gnomes
Helpers that I call my own
And ones I cannot live without
Not to mention, they've got the clout
Kind of hope you'll notice, too
Some acrostic thanks to you

You really make me smile
Liz
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14 posted 12-19-1999 05:50 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Elizabeth:  Well done.. and love the last line..*g*

HUGS

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...


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15 posted 12-19-1999 06:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is wonderful, Elizabeth! Is there no end to your talent? I must say this is superb!  

 Denise


Elizabeth Santos
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16 posted 12-19-1999 08:01 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Rainbow and Denise
Thank you both, glad you liked it
Liz
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17 posted 12-19-1999 09:13 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

And a very good attempt it was, my friend!  

 Nail to the mast her holy flag,
Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes


Nan
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18 posted 12-19-1999 09:20 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

....ya know - I really enjoy reading these - as I have yours....

writing them is a whole 'nother story...
Christopher
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19 posted 12-19-1999 11:35 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

A big "Bravissimo" from me here!
I LOVE acrostics, and you've nalied this one beautifully!
Dark Angel
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20 posted 12-20-1999 01:15 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Elizabeth, this is terrific!!! I love this, And I love acrostics. Well Done!!   I'll be looking out for more.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Elizabeth Santos
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21 posted 12-20-1999 02:16 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thank you Nan, Christopher and DarkAngel for your comments
Liz
 
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