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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 1999-12-19 07:09 AM



Was trying to make every other line rhyme also, which I don't usually do. I admire those who do this with such ease.


First Try at Acrostics

First try is always the most difficult
In any new and serious endeavor
Regardless the end that you exult
Sometimes it's a little hard to weather
Those who tell you to just dive in
Are those who never tried themselves
That longing which you have within
This is the force that makes you delve
Even God took time to think
Making man was complicated
Putting woman next to him
This has been quite under-rated

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-19-1999).]

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Severn
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1 posted 1999-12-19 07:14 AM


Love that ending my friend!!!

hehe.

Well done! From someone who has only done two (and you saw one) I applaud you!

K

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2 posted 1999-12-19 07:47 AM


Applauds!!! Must be nice to master something in your first attempt  
You did well Elizabeth  

Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 1999-12-19 07:55 AM


Thank you, girls
I take a bow
One more lesson learned in the Passions school of poetry.
I'll try to make it better next time
Liz

Pepper
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4 posted 1999-12-19 08:58 AM


First attempt huh, I never would have guessed that!....I, like Severn loved the ending... Well done!!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



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5 posted 1999-12-19 10:04 AM


!!!

Doc here,
Allow me to translate, I believe what my friend is trying to say is...

Never would have thought
It to be your first
Congratulations E. Santos
Eloquent your verse

Once you've tried this form
Nothing's in your way
Each will be as good I'm sure
(you'd not have it another way)


 Hands clapping

Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 1999-12-19 10:39 AM


Pepper, Thanks, sweetie

Doc

Thank you, my acrostics friend
How wonderfully you do wend
Acostics verse with utter grace
No one would attempt outpace
Kind of makes me emulate
So sharp a poet to imitate

Liz


[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-19-1999).]

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 1999-12-19 10:51 AM


Elizabeth, my friend -

Very nicely done.
By golly, I think you've got it !

Said with grace.
Done with ease.
An acrostic from you,
does surely please.

~*Marge*~




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WhtDove
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8 posted 1999-12-19 11:27 AM


Well a job well done it is! Very good!
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 1999-12-19 01:04 PM


Thank you Marge and WhtDove,
I'm learning!
Liz

Michael
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10 posted 1999-12-19 01:44 PM


A very good first attempt, Elizabeth.  I hope you will endeavor further into this realm.  


Michael

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11 posted 1999-12-19 02:10 PM


Good work, Elizabeth. You only faltered on the rhyme once and the acrostic was excellent. Let's see some more!
Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 1999-12-19 02:32 PM


Elizabeth, You did it swell,
But then you do everything well.
You filled the order the first time out
Not only well, but with lots of clout.
Love ya,
Sy

Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 1999-12-19 03:35 PM


Michael and Balladeer,
Compliments from the Experts, humbly received
Thank you

Sy,
Thank you for describing my gnomes
Helpers that I call my own
And ones I cannot live without
Not to mention, they've got the clout
Kind of hope you'll notice, too
Some acrostic thanks to you

You really make me smile
Liz

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14 posted 1999-12-19 05:50 PM


Elizabeth:  Well done.. and love the last line..*g*

HUGS

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...



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15 posted 1999-12-19 06:51 PM


This is wonderful, Elizabeth! Is there no end to your talent? I must say this is superb!  

 Denise



Elizabeth Santos
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16 posted 1999-12-19 08:01 PM


Rainbow and Denise
Thank you both, glad you liked it
Liz

Elizabeth
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17 posted 1999-12-19 09:13 PM


And a very good attempt it was, my friend!  

 Nail to the mast her holy flag,
Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes



Nan
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18 posted 1999-12-19 09:20 PM


....ya know - I really enjoy reading these - as I have yours....

writing them is a whole 'nother story...

Christopher
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19 posted 1999-12-19 11:35 PM


A big "Bravissimo" from me here!
I LOVE acrostics, and you've nalied this one beautifully!

Dark Angel
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20 posted 1999-12-20 01:15 AM


Elizabeth, this is terrific!!! I love this, And I love acrostics. Well Done!!   I'll be looking out for more.

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Elizabeth Santos
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21 posted 1999-12-20 02:16 AM


Thank you Nan, Christopher and DarkAngel for your comments
Liz

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