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Severn
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0 posted 12-18-1999 08:59 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Words
bring the breath
from my breast
and exhume
my deathly
memory

I thought I’d
laid you to rest

will you not let
me wilt?

and find proverbial Peace

(drive a stake
through another’s
coffin lid)

bury me
in fresh life

carry yourself
to your own grave
and leave me

just
an autumn leaf
trying to blow

your words
torture
the wound
of our demise

so blind are you
to any
but yourself

you do not see

living again…
this tired leaf

fallen
from my unshaped tree

and I sigh…

remembering

19.12.99

© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 12-18-1999 09:17 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Sad, powerful, and filled with your constant excellence, my friend. (((hugs)))



 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Nan
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2 posted 12-18-1999 09:22 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

A bittersweet feel this has, indeed.....
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 12-18-1999 10:06 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Whew...Severn, this is an extreamly powerful and well written poem. As Nan says, it's truly bittersweet and your emotions shine clear in it. Memories often die hard my friend  
Martie
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4 posted 12-18-1999 11:53 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Let your memories nourish your strength as you do in this poem and you will be free. You are so good Kamla with those words.
DreamEvil
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5 posted 12-19-1999 12:13 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Kamla you seem to have an affinity for the double helix in your work. It shows prominently in your verse my friend.

'Tis of course an awesome piece of work.  


 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
-------------------------------------------------------
"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)

Seaangel
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6 posted 12-19-1999 02:39 AM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

Ditto, ditto. A lot of moving imagery in this, Severn, and a strong thread of thought.
Seaangel
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7 posted 12-19-1999 03:27 AM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

Forgot...HUGS!!


[This message has been edited by Seaangel (edited 12-19-1999).]
Severn
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8 posted 12-19-1999 03:31 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Thanks everyone - rather a depressing thought of an hour only - not to be taken too seriously - by anyone.

K
Christopher
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9 posted 12-19-1999 04:18 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Gotcha.  
Severn
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10 posted 12-19-1999 05:38 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Good.
Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 12-19-1999 05:57 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Severn, Lovely poem
Gotcha
Liz
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12 posted 12-19-1999 09:03 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Wow...powerful indeed! Big Hugs my friend......

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


lostboy
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13 posted 12-19-1999 10:07 AM       View Profile for lostboy   Email lostboy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lostboy

Severn, everyone's already about summed it up, very powerful indeed! Loved the wording and phrasing.
Michael
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14 posted 12-19-1999 01:48 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Nothing in life worse than a memory that just won't go away, I know.  ((HUGS)) Your words ring strong and true, beautifully done.  


Michael
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15 posted 12-19-1999 01:54 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh Severn....this just makes me hurt inside for you - I do not wish this sadness on anyone as wonderful as you he...Memories die hard, as someone else above already said.  Indeed, some never die - I say that, from experience......Try not to be bitter, instead call it an experience to add to your collection of loving memories.....You are so young & have so much ahead of you to look forward to!  Chin up lass!!!  

 - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF

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16 posted 12-19-1999 02:03 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Severn -

We all need the sighs
of sweet remembering
to remind us ...
that we are more
for the experience.

Your leaf blows so gracefully.
I see it dancing in the wind.
Swirling you around,
shaping you for what's to come
not for what has been.

Smile, little one.
I love you. ~Marge~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 12-19-1999 02:44 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
Your poem says more between the lines, then
anyone can read. You have my love and any
support you need *L* Sy
samsonheart
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18 posted 12-20-1999 08:20 PM       View Profile for samsonheart   Email samsonheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for samsonheart

Powerful poem, severn, your emotions shine through.

samsonheart
Severn
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19 posted 12-20-1999 08:51 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Caroline - thankyou. Many hugs returned.

Nan - got any sugar?  

Ruth -  

Martie - that is fantastic advice and I appreciate it, my friend.

Scott - it is perhaps through my search for emphasis that this occurs. Thankyou dark one.

Sea - hey, they were nice hugs, house sister!

Chris - LOL

Lizzy - smiles

*S* - Thankyou sweet one.

LB - thankyou!  

Michael - yes. many thanks, my friend.

Gen - you are a sweetie, you know? Sometimes we must give reign to the hurt or it will be swallowed and perhaps become poisonous. Thankyou...

Marge(y) - I love you too...thankyou...

Sy - that is just wonderful dear friend.

Samsomheart - why thankyou...


K
andy
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since 12-16-1999
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20 posted 12-21-1999 12:10 AM       View Profile for andy   Email andy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for andy

HUGS and a Merry Christmas for my  
poet-of-a-friend, Severn !  
Nate Dogg
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21 posted 12-21-1999 06:36 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Very good poem severn.
 
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