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Rare Journey into Free Verse

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Balladeer
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0 posted 12-18-1999 05:34 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer



The blow came from nowhere

unexpected
unwarranted
undeserved

I yelped in surprise

jumped back
found shelter
curled into
a tiny ball
hid

Now you call again
smiling
entreating
hand extended
treat offered
enticing

I will come to you...but

slinking
crouched
muscles tensed
head bowed
eyes on hands
warily

After a time I will

lick
love
wag
fetch

But I will not

lie down
roll over

And I will never

expose
my
belly
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 12-18-1999 05:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! You can even write free verse! This is excellent! I am impressed! Your talent is truly diverse!  

 Denise


Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 12-18-1999 05:40 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Balladeer
I just had a good laugh!
This is wonderful!
You should do this more often!
Liz
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3 posted 12-18-1999 05:41 PM       View Profile for sraet   Email sraet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sraet

Silly as this may be...I was saving my "50th" post (finally, no longer a "new member") for something I've been working on.  However, this is so very fine (copacetic, I believe) that I just couldn't help myself.  As much as I love your rhyme, I'd love to see more of this from you!
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 12-18-1999 05:46 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer -
This is just beautiful
and well understood.
Maybe free verse shouldn't
be so rare to you.

I've seen this puppy !
This is Be Kind To Animals day.
Come here, boy.
My heart has a 'no-kill' policy.
Love ~Marge~


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hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 12-18-1999 05:48 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Applauds very loudly. Ah, not only free verse, but Good free verse  
Pepper
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6 posted 12-18-1999 05:51 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

A poem that is both sad and humorous all in one.....you are amazing Sir  

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


sandgrain
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7 posted 12-18-1999 05:59 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

What a marvelous teacher you are!  If only old dogs like me could learn all these new tricks!  Free verse was never greatly appreciated by me, but this forum is changing my outlook, especially reading any of your works...they're great in any form.
Balladeer
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8 posted 12-18-1999 06:02 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Denise....I wish I could but, compared to Severn or Martie, I am but a dabbler....but thank you

Elizabeth....glad I made you smile.  

Sraet...I am honored to catapult you into member status. Welcome, MEMBER!

Marge....for you, I would eliminate my " no roll over policy"! I could even learn to sit and beg!

Hoot..From you, I am honored by the compliment. Thank you.

Pepper...Thank you SO much. You are pretty amazing yourself!  

a sandgrain...BIG smile on my face from your kind words! Thank you.



[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 12-18-1999).]
Christopher
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9 posted 12-18-1999 06:09 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

An unexpected treat here Mr. Deer! I find it well worth the stop!
LOL and funny too! But what's that about "never say never?"
Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 12-18-1999 06:37 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
You write well in any form.
Thanks for the laugh.
Michael
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11 posted 12-18-1999 06:57 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

This is great, Balladeer.  I know how it feels venturing into the "free verse" realm.  I just can't make myself feel comfortable there, but his shined...caught me completely off guard with the ending.

Michael
Severn
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12 posted 12-18-1999 07:04 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I like! I like! I like!



More?
(Hehehe - another converted...  )
Marilyn
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13 posted 12-18-1999 07:36 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Well done my friend. Free verse suits you well. I do not like the form myself and rarely venture into it. Kudo's.

caroline
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14 posted 12-18-1999 07:44 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Oh DO visit the world of free verse more often! It likes you  

This is great!


 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Nan
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15 posted 12-18-1999 07:58 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Hey - You..... Get back over here.... Sing me a villanelle.....
Martie
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16 posted 12-18-1999 11:03 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This was great Balladeer, but I think that anything from your pen would be--time for a short story now, then the novel--and thanks for the compliment earlier.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
John Yaws
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17 posted 12-18-1999 11:25 PM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

Ouch! Nothing funny about this, Balladeer. Been there, done that, got the shirt. well written my friend.
WhtDove
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18 posted 12-18-1999 11:33 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Whatever you put your pen to, it comes out great. btw sandgrain is my mom.
Balladeer
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19 posted 12-18-1999 11:57 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank  you all for my feeble attempt at the free verse arena.

You're right, Gunslinger. There's not.

Hey, Nan! I'm still at the poetry party (they had a computer upstairs hehe) and I've got 8 new members ready to sign up. They love the site!
Iloveit
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20 posted 12-20-1999 10:00 AM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

yep, really good stuff....oh and the poem is good too *g*....no really great poem, you say so much, whether you write a poetic story, or choose a few select words....you always get your point across....hugs

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21 posted 12-20-1999 03:44 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Such a journey shouldn't be rare! (the format, 'Deer one... not the pain! *G*) Well done!
Sven
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22 posted 12-20-1999 04:53 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

You should journey more into this territory my friend!!

Excellent work. . .


 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


RobertB
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23 posted 12-20-1999 05:12 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

WELCOME my friend to the world of free verse.

Now that didn't hurt toooooo bad did it???

Robert

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 if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
Local Rebel
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24 posted 12-21-1999 12:22 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

It is a dog's life... well leashed!
 
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