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How I was saved by love

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 12-18-1999 01:02 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin


  How I was saved by love

I dreamt the raven spoke to me,
In a gie of mute soliloquy.
An epilogue in silent gesture,
Of some coming guise of venture
He stood an epitaph in state.

Formal black his suit of clothes,
Downward pointed his beak and nose.
His actions seemed a weird malaise
But his eyes were blood red ablaze,
Implying I, some awesome fate.

Then he cast a soothing spell,
Like cooling waters of a well.
That made me sink in passions plea
In reference to my not to be.
And my mind flew to abrogate.

The raven tends oblivion,
He tarries him on carrion.
A fearful symbol and a guise,
Impending doom of ones demise.
Opening the gate, quick to late.

I cannot say I welcomed him.
Weather real or ghostly whim
And I questioned his probate?
But he shook his head in wait,
And again he nodded the date.

He plucked my soul in villainy
I screamed a cry of agony.
I swore to all the gods above,
I could not go, I was in love.

So he gently laid me back in bed
And whispered me, I was not dead.
© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
sandgrain
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1 posted 12-18-1999 01:22 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

Sounds like an oximorin to say such an elequent nightmare but indeed it is!  Love it!
Denise
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2 posted 12-18-1999 01:27 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Whew! This would have been enough to make me glad I woke up!   Excellent, Sy!

 Denise


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3 posted 12-18-1999 01:27 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour -

Awesome testimony to love.
LUCKY MAN YOU ARE !

I enjoyed this post, my friend.
~*Marge*~


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Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 12-18-1999 02:10 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
Please! Don't go yet!
Where would we be without your poetry.
Lost!
Your verse is fearsomly beautiful
Amazingly descriptive
Chillingly real
Liz
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 12-18-1999 03:50 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

A Sandgrain,
The closest I could find to oixmorin was oxymoron if thats what you meant I an flattered, thats a ten dollar word and I thank you.  
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 12-18-1999 03:58 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sweet Denise,
Thank you for the read and comment, didn't mean to scare you. *L*
Marge,
So glad you enjoyed the poem, I alway wanted to write something like that. *L* Sy
Liz,
Don't plan to go for a while,
Your adjectives gave me a flush
or is it blush? *L* Sy
Nan
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7 posted 12-18-1999 06:23 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

This one is pretty intense, Sy.... I'm glad you're hanging around, though - ya know???....
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 12-18-1999 07:13 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
I read this on the run the first time
Didn't have a chance to say that I
liked the form of this poem
Very, very, very nice
Love ya,
Liz
Michael
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9 posted 12-18-1999 07:16 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Man, this is wonderful, Sy.  Precious ending, I guess love truly does conquer all.


Michael
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10 posted 12-18-1999 07:24 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

WOW!

A big resounding clapping noise echoing from the poetic dome of my mind!

You captured me with every line, Sy.

I do have one question - is 'Weather' deliberate or meant to be 'whether'? I'm just curious - I read it both ways and they both make sense.

Master poet, take a bow for this one.

K
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11 posted 12-18-1999 07:52 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

(hands Seymour the "Dazzling Poem" trophy and runs off...don't want that bird to see me.)


great poem Mr. Tabin  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 12-18-1999 07:54 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Nan,
For you I'll hang around. *L* Sy
Liz,
You got me with the verys
Every one went through my heart.
*L* ya, Sy
Michael,
You got that right,
Love conquers all.
Severn,
It's a mute point, I was concious of the two,
And thought I'd use the more obscure one.
Whether would be more one directional?
I think, what do you think I value your opinion.
*L* Sy
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13 posted 12-19-1999 01:30 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Wow...spine tingling wow!  I'm glad I'm in love!  LOL  If that's what keeps us alive, then so be it !!   Fabulous read my friend!  Glad I found it and brought it back!  

 - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF

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14 posted 12-19-1999 07:12 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Well, Sy, I like it as 'Weather' too - for it adds to the metaphorical content and encourages the reader to pause and think - a great thing in a poem.

Whether is indeed one directional, my friend.
I felt that weather gives two qualities - a concrete reality and also as ravens are harbingers of storms and omens - it also juxtaposes against the traditional concept of weather as said concrete element; creating an emotional storm.

What do you think?

(Reminds me of Poe)

K
hoot_owl_rn
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Wow, Wow, Wow..............you have outdone your self on this one Seymore. What a piece of writing!! I absolutely love the format you chose to display your fine words in with this one...it does much to add to the poem.
"He plucked my soul in villainy
I screamed a cry of agony.
I swore to all the gods above,
I could not go, I was in love.

So he gently laid me back in bed
And whispered me, I was not dead."

What can I say...these words hopefully will be a classic someday like Poe's the Raven.
Great job!!!!

Pepper
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I applauad you Sy....
Haunting and Wonderful
Great Poem!

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon


Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 12-19-1999 02:54 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

PFF,
Thank you sweet, your answer was neat. *L* Sy
Severn,
Thank you doll, I think I'll leave it. *L* sy
Hoot,
Thank you for the classic comp, Love you too
Sy
Pepper,
Haunting is what I was looking for, bless you
*L* Sy
passing shadows
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damn Sy
you go
passing shadows
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19 posted 04-16-2005 09:29 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

this is the one
Artic Wind
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20 posted 11-12-2007 07:07 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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