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Mr. Loneliness

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Balladeer
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0 posted 12-16-1999 10:59 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Well, hello, Mr. Loneliness, I'm back with you again
I see you've got the place fixed up just like it was back then.
I really didn't think that I would see you any more
Yet here I am again, my friend, just like it was before.

I see the cans of tuna fish stacked on the pantry shelf
With macaroni, cheese and all things I can fix myself,
A quart of milk, a dozen eggs,  a jar of  apple jelly,
A pound or two of lunchmeat and some cole slaw from the deli.

One knife, one spoon, one fork, one plate, 100 coffee cups,
Some liquid soap and Drano for the times the sink erupts.
A microwave and toaster oven. Man, I'm really set.
Just don't know how much luckier a simple man can get.

Let's see, my good friend Loneliness,  one toilet paper roll,
One cloth, one towel, one bristle brush to clean the toilet bowl,
One bar of soap and some shampoo - a razor, too, I think
One single lime-green toothbrush laying on the bathroom sink.

I see a stack of magazines stacked up next to the john
(With Beanie Weenie dinners, who knows how long one stays on?!)
The Pizza Hut delivery number right next to the phone,
A must for men like you and me who chance to live alone.

The bed is rather small. There's not a lot of room to spare.
It really doesn't matter, though, since only I'll be there.
The reading lamp there on the table gives a decent light
For those times when I want to read myself to sleep at night.

It's funny, Mr. Loneliness, sometimes to me it seems
That, through these past few years, I had been living in a dream,
A dream where love lived here with me and laughter filled the air
That gave my soul a peace and happiness beyond compare.

I dreamed that when I woke up in the morn, I'd see a face
That  rendered me quite speechless with its beauty, charm and grace
But, like the times before, that dream has, too, come to an end
And I awake to greet the day with you, my kind, old friend.

Life goes on, Mr. Loneliness. It has its ups and downs
And, every time that it gets rough, I know you'll be around.
Let's order up a pizza, maybe have a beer or two;
How blessed, or cursed, I am to have a faithful friend like you.




[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 12-16-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
John Yaws
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1 posted 12-16-1999 11:06 PM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

My friend, you scare me. Sometimes it's like reading my own thoughts from another man's pen. Deja who? An excellent piece, sir,
avant garde! ~GS~
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2 posted 12-16-1999 11:09 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Sounds so sad. I hope I never meet 'Mr. Lonliness'. Well done, as usual Balladeer!  

 Denise


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When your done with Mr. Lonliness, send him my way would ya?  Sounds like a good time, with that pizza and beer...and some quiet too. I could always use some quiet.  
Nan
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4 posted 12-16-1999 11:12 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Geesh....... Guys live that way too???
wayoutwalt
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5 posted 12-16-1999 11:20 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

you carried the pace well balladeer as for the subject o thuh poem i can well relate though i have a big family still seems mr lonliness likes to haunt me.
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6 posted 12-16-1999 11:36 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
That mister loneliness is a very busy fellow
I thought I saw him the other night
In a small bordello.

I look for your poem they are a delight to me. Sy
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7 posted 12-16-1999 11:40 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Well, perhaps Mr Loneliness just needs a ramble through some hills and a good strong woman to come and carry him off...

*smile*

This is great as usual, 'deer.
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Seems like everywhere I go,
I just can't seem to shake
These little friends that follow me,
Mr. Lonely and Mr. Heartache.

They never have a cheerful face,
And always hang around.
Each time I think I'm on my way,
Here they come to bring me down.

I think I'll run and try to hide
From their piercing eyes.
I wished that they would understand.
I don't want to be their friend, or even socialize.

I finally found that special someone.
I think I'll cry no more.
Who's there?  I think I hear
Someone knocking on my door.

Hello Mr. Lonely, hello Mr. Heartache
Come on in.
Yes, here I am, you found me.
I guess I just can't win.


Balladeer, sorry, you inspired me.  I loved your poem, great piece.
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9 posted 12-17-1999 12:01 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

My thanks to you all fine poets.

Eloise, you're sorry? If I helped to inspire that, I'm estatic! Nice poem!
Elizabeth Santos
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Well, you weren't this lonely on that Texas highway!
But this one is also well written
Liz
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Oh dear, lonliness is such a bad companion really.  To be alone is sometimes joyful, but lonliness hurts. We all feel its pull from time to time though. So if this guy is staying long at your place, I think it's time to kick him out.  Well done poem Balladear.
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"Lonely...I'm Mr. Lonely..."  Great ol' song, wasn't it?!

It's a good thing I know this could never be you, my dear.  My heart couldn't take the burden of the aforementioned loneliness upon you!! You see, I know there are laws against kidnapping but, I think I'd have to bend the rules a bit and wisk you away.  
(I know, I know you mentioned your friend in the end...you always add that special balladeer twist!!)  As always, fine work Michael.  
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Balladeer....yep...he's my partner too....wish he could cook....those breakfasts of eating cold pizza and washing it down with warm beer are the pits.....nicely done, been there, am there...hate it there.....
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Balladeer -

Really a great rendering on this one.
You've so much to share and have done
it very well.
Enjoyed it so much.
~*Marge*~


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This guy gets around... he's been my companion far too long! Well done, 'Deer one!
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Well...I don't do the cans of tuna and pizza and stuff..yuck! I've got a kitchen full of food and hate to cook just for myself, so I seldom eat dinner. If you ever get up this way, come on by and I'll cook you a big pan of my famous lasagna, complete with salad, breadsticks and chianti  
(Promise not to cook venison for you, 'Deer! LOL)  


 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


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Deer

This was a very very sad poem (well written, though).  All of you ladies out there (except Lorelei, of course).  It is your duty to get down to Florida and give this guy a great lay so that he will keep his spirits up.  Don't delay, give Deer a lay.
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18 posted 12-17-1999 01:56 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Again, thank you all.
Sally....laws are made to be broken  
Caroline...It's a deal. On my way! Uh, you know any good mappers?
Long John...Thank you for the commercial and I love the way you think. After all, a deer lay is much better than a free Toe lay!! Good to hear from you!
Michael
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19 posted 12-17-1999 02:19 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Well this one sure says a lot.  If Mr. Loneliness ever leaves you high and dry, I know a lady named Misery who could always use some company.  As solitude is almost personified in my life, this one reached a bit deeper than most...good job, Balladeer.


Michael
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Hey, I have the same friend. I'm glad to know he keeps good comapany though Well written my friend  
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Bal and all: What I want to know is how come this guy Mr or Mrs..Loneliness gets to visit me at the same time as you guys cause I swear I don't drink that much coffee..*g*

HUSG

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...


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Ms. Lonliness visits me too, perhaps your Mr and my Ms should go out together Balladeer.
And honey if you weren't an ocean away I'd love to share a pizza with you my friend  

 What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

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Wowo, this's a really nice poem, sir...and i must add, those words of urs do sound rather poignant and sad.

And yes, i am well acquainted with this little friend of yours, and i can still recommend some more for u; Mr Sad, Mr Crabby, and even Mr Desperation.
But then again, we wouldnt wanna see them so often, yes?

ciaos, and once again, lovely poem.
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Reading your work is sheer pleasure.  For years I was extremely lonely with 5 kids and a husband.  I believe it comes from not feeling understood, but it can't be your type as you express feelings so well in your lines, everyone understands!
 
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