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Mr. Loneliness
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Mr. Loneliness |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Well, hello, Mr. Loneliness, I'm back with you again I see you've got the place fixed up just like it was back then. I really didn't think that I would see you any more Yet here I am again, my friend, just like it was before. I see the cans of tuna fish stacked on the pantry shelf With macaroni, cheese and all things I can fix myself, A quart of milk, a dozen eggs, a jar of apple jelly, A pound or two of lunchmeat and some cole slaw from the deli. One knife, one spoon, one fork, one plate, 100 coffee cups, Some liquid soap and Drano for the times the sink erupts. A microwave and toaster oven. Man, I'm really set. Just don't know how much luckier a simple man can get. Let's see, my good friend Loneliness, one toilet paper roll, One cloth, one towel, one bristle brush to clean the toilet bowl, One bar of soap and some shampoo - a razor, too, I think One single lime-green toothbrush laying on the bathroom sink. I see a stack of magazines stacked up next to the john (With Beanie Weenie dinners, who knows how long one stays on?!) The Pizza Hut delivery number right next to the phone, A must for men like you and me who chance to live alone. The bed is rather small. There's not a lot of room to spare. It really doesn't matter, though, since only I'll be there. The reading lamp there on the table gives a decent light For those times when I want to read myself to sleep at night. It's funny, Mr. Loneliness, sometimes to me it seems That, through these past few years, I had been living in a dream, A dream where love lived here with me and laughter filled the air That gave my soul a peace and happiness beyond compare. I dreamed that when I woke up in the morn, I'd see a face That rendered me quite speechless with its beauty, charm and grace But, like the times before, that dream has, too, come to an end And I awake to greet the day with you, my kind, old friend. Life goes on, Mr. Loneliness. It has its ups and downs And, every time that it gets rough, I know you'll be around. Let's order up a pizza, maybe have a beer or two; How blessed, or cursed, I am to have a faithful friend like you. [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 12-16-1999).] |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
My friend, you scare me. Sometimes it's like reading my own thoughts from another man's pen. Deja who? An excellent piece, sir, avant garde! ~GS~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sounds so sad. I hope I never meet 'Mr. Lonliness'. Well done, as usual Balladeer!  Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
When your done with Mr. Lonliness, send him my way would ya? Sounds like a good time, with that pizza and beer...and some quiet too. I could always use some quiet. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Geesh....... Guys live that way too??? |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
you carried the pace well balladeer as for the subject o thuh poem i can well relate though i have a big family still seems mr lonliness likes to haunt me. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, That mister loneliness is a very busy fellow I thought I saw him the other night In a small bordello. I look for your poem they are a delight to me. Sy |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well, perhaps Mr Loneliness just needs a ramble through some hills and a good strong woman to come and carry him off... *smile* This is great as usual, 'deer. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Seems like everywhere I go, I just can't seem to shake These little friends that follow me, Mr. Lonely and Mr. Heartache. They never have a cheerful face, And always hang around. Each time I think I'm on my way, Here they come to bring me down. I think I'll run and try to hide From their piercing eyes. I wished that they would understand. I don't want to be their friend, or even socialize. I finally found that special someone. I think I'll cry no more. Who's there? I think I hear Someone knocking on my door. Hello Mr. Lonely, hello Mr. Heartache Come on in. Yes, here I am, you found me. I guess I just can't win. Balladeer, sorry, you inspired me. I loved your poem, great piece. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My thanks to you all fine poets. Eloise, you're sorry? If I helped to inspire that, I'm estatic! Nice poem! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Well, you weren't this lonely on that Texas highway! But this one is also well written Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh dear, lonliness is such a bad companion really. To be alone is sometimes joyful, but lonliness hurts. We all feel its pull from time to time though. So if this guy is staying long at your place, I think it's time to kick him out. Well done poem Balladear. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
"Lonely...I'm Mr. Lonely..." Great ol' song, wasn't it?! It's a good thing I know this could never be you, my dear. My heart couldn't take the burden of the aforementioned loneliness upon you!! You see, I know there are laws against kidnapping but, I think I'd have to bend the rules a bit and wisk you away.  (I know, I know you mentioned your friend in the end...you always add that special balladeer twist!!) As always, fine work Michael. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Balladeer....yep...he's my partner too....wish he could cook....those breakfasts of eating cold pizza and washing it down with warm beer are the pits.....nicely done, been there, am there...hate it there..... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer - Really a great rendering on this one. You've so much to share and have done it very well. Enjoyed it so much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This guy gets around... he's been my companion far too long! Well done, 'Deer one! |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Well...I don't do the cans of tuna and pizza and stuff..yuck! I've got a kitchen full of food and hate to cook just for myself, so I seldom eat dinner. If you ever get up this way, come on by and I'll cook you a big pan of my famous lasagna, complete with salad, breadsticks and chianti (Promise not to cook venison for you, 'Deer! LOL) It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Deer This was a very very sad poem (well written, though). All of you ladies out there (except Lorelei, of course). It is your duty to get down to Florida and give this guy a great lay so that he will keep his spirits up. Don't delay, give Deer a lay. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Again, thank you all. Sally....laws are made to be broken Caroline...It's a deal. On my way! Uh, you know any good mappers? Long John...Thank you for the commercial and I love the way you think. After all, a deer lay is much better than a free Toe lay!! Good to hear from you! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well this one sure says a lot. If Mr. Loneliness ever leaves you high and dry, I know a lady named Misery who could always use some company. As solitude is almost personified in my life, this one reached a bit deeper than most...good job, Balladeer. Michael |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Hey, I have the same friend. I'm glad to know he keeps good comapany though Well written my friend |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Bal and all: What I want to know is how come this guy Mr or Mrs..Loneliness gets to visit me at the same time as you guys cause I swear I don't drink that much coffee..*g* HUSG Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Ms. Lonliness visits me too, perhaps your Mr and my Ms should go out together Balladeer. And honey if you weren't an ocean away I'd love to share a pizza with you my friend What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Mel New Member
since 1999-12-17
Posts 2 |
Wowo, this's a really nice poem, sir...and i must add, those words of urs do sound rather poignant and sad. And yes, i am well acquainted with this little friend of yours, and i can still recommend some more for u; Mr Sad, Mr Crabby, and even Mr Desperation. But then again, we wouldnt wanna see them so often, yes? ciaos, and once again, lovely poem. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Reading your work is sheer pleasure. For years I was extremely lonely with 5 kids and a husband. I believe it comes from not feeling understood, but it can't be your type as you express feelings so well in your lines, everyone understands! |
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Quest New Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 9 |
I thank you for the poem and say hello to you, my friend. One knife, one spoon, one fork, one plate, is all that I can tend. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
friends with Ms. Loneliness? oh no, not me instead we formed a company Lonely Partners LLC it's a limited liability company we took a vote, and….the loneliness that lives so deep in me… its all her fault she's the president I am just the secretary…. I keep the minutes of all the company meetings and record them in poetry form... great poem my friend, would wish that life on no one, most of all you....hugs< !signature--> remember this...nobody has an unbreakable heart [This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 12-20-1999).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is touching Deer what a wonderful way you have to tell a story |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Beautiful ARCTIC WIND |
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