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Words Unspoken

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 12-16-1999 09:51 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Words Unspoken

Why can't he speak to me
In terms he knows I understand
While my malnourished heart
Just sits and waits at his command

Perhaps he thinks his words
Are ones that I can't bear to hear
But at times those words unspoken
Are more brutal to the ear

It matters little how he feels
If he would just say more
It's what he doesn't say
That simply cuts me to the core

It's as though life isn't living
No heart does it possess
The silence of the spirit
Is unbounded hollowness

A heart that's shroud in silence
Is unhealthy for the soul
The sweetest song, if left unsung
Is a worthless piece of gold

Elizabeth Santos
© Copyright 1999 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Kevin
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1 posted 12-16-1999 09:56 PM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kevin

LIZ this is beautiful, its my favorite piece of yours, if not ive read in this forum
i hope you dont mind im printing it out, its found itself so close to me already,
Congradulations, on such a masterpiece
Femme's Father
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2 posted 12-16-1999 10:23 PM       View Profile for Femme's Father   Email Femme's Father   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Femme's Father

Mercy me!!! I can hardly believe--
There is no end- only beginning you see..
Out of the fathom-less depths--
To the vastness of the sea...
Ever flowing- ever growing--
Even upward ever still..
He's taking you-He's moulding you--
To do His perfect will!!  God Bless..

I just jotted this down for you; Liz, as I heard it come on celestial wings. A true child of the spirit I would say...
   James David    "The heart that sails on
spirit wings..with joy & peace will always
   sing"...

John Yaws
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3 posted 12-16-1999 10:38 PM       View Profile for John Yaws   Email John Yaws   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit John Yaws's Home Page   View IP for John Yaws

Liz, it was beautiful. I actually considered penning a reply. it was there in my mind as I read your work.
Seaangel
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4 posted 12-16-1999 10:52 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

Lovely, Elizabeth, although I do feel that a song 'unsung' may be better than no song at all.

 "Stop this day and night with me and you shall possess the origin of all poems,
You shall possess the good of the earth and sun (there are millions of suns left,)
You shall no longer take things at second or third hand, nor look through the eyes of the dead, nor feed on the spectres in books,
You shall not look through my eyes either, nor take things from me,
You shall listen to all sides and filter them from your self." >Walt Whitman, Song of Myself.
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5 posted 12-16-1999 11:06 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

LIZ, the last stanza is worth its weight in gold. The entire poem is a jewel.

 To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world.

Denise
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6 posted 12-16-1999 11:11 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Silence is not always golden, is it? Well done, Elizabeth!  

 Denise


Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 12-16-1999 11:19 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,

I hear your cry , I'm on the fly,
I'll get my horse and lance that lie.
I'll be you knight, I'll fight your fight
Just point this dragon out in light.
I cannot stand your sadness tone
It shivers me down to the bone.
Just ask of me your wish of wish.
And I'll make your wish my wish.
*L* Sy
The poem is exquisite
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 12-16-1999 11:44 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I appreciate all of your comments, and wasn't expecting such positive response on this little poem. Thank you!
Liz
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 12-16-1999 11:58 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
Please don't worry about the tone
The source of these words is unknown
Actually it happened long ago
With a father that I loved so
I had gone through the fires of hell
But couldn't to my parents tell
When learned the truth, not a single word
No interest in my life I heard
The silence was a deafening sound
A silence heard the whole world round
And ever since I have taught my own
To tell me whatever trouble they've sewn
And I will love them just the same
So you see, no dragons to be slain
But this poem could apply to other things
In fact it has an applicable ring
The bottom line is that people should talk
And never at communication balk
You should try to open up your soul
That's what makes a being whole
Liz
Severn
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10 posted 12-17-1999 05:53 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

This, Liz is one of the most beautiful poems you have written yet.

Mind if I keep it?
Marge Tindal
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11 posted 12-17-1999 06:47 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Psst !

I love this.


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 12-17-1999 07:08 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Kamla and Marge,
If you two like it, I'm happy!

Sy, I don't openly talk about my dragons.
Liz
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13 posted 12-17-1999 07:45 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

The entire poem is beautiful... and the last verse a poem in itself!! Well done!
Dark Angel
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14 posted 12-17-1999 07:50 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh Elizabeth, this is truly beautiful!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 12-17-1999 08:34 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Suthern,
You know, i think we think alike.
Thank you

Dark angel,
If you think its beautiful, then it probably is.
Liz
caroline
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16 posted 12-17-1999 09:09 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Elizabeth, this is stunning...it left me with tears in my eyes, as I can relate all to well to this piece. It is exquisite, and I'm definitely keeping it. Thank you so much for sharing it here.

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


Corinne
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Elizabeth,

The heart doesn't know when to move on, but lingers with the hope of relationships turning around...Poignant, beautiful piece.

Corinne
LngJhnAg
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18 posted 12-17-1999 10:42 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

This was a truly poignant poem - so beautifully written.  I fear I may be on the other side of this.
Elizabeth Santos
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19 posted 12-17-1999 05:22 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Caroline, Corinne, LngJhnAg,
It seems like several poets understand this poem. Must have had a similar experience.
Caroline, you may have it. Thank you all for your remarks
Liz
Michael
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20 posted 12-17-1999 05:47 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Ah, true and powerful words here.  There is no worth to a song left unsung...especially of the heart.  Good poem.


Michael
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21 posted 12-17-1999 06:48 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

I enjoyed your poem!!!!
Elizabeth Santos
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22 posted 12-17-1999 10:32 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Michael and vandana,
Thank you both very much. I'm getting the feeling most people know the power of silence.
Liz
hoot_owl_rn
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How beautiful  
Sonny
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24 posted 12-18-1999 02:58 AM       View Profile for Sonny   Email Sonny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sonny

Your poem was very elegantly written and conveys your emotion untainted.  The purity of your writing serves to enhance the power of your message.  It's sincerity is unquestionable; it's beauty heart breaking.
 
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