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Words Unspoken |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Words Unspoken Why can't he speak to me In terms he knows I understand While my malnourished heart Just sits and waits at his command Perhaps he thinks his words Are ones that I can't bear to hear But at times those words unspoken Are more brutal to the ear It matters little how he feels If he would just say more It's what he doesn't say That simply cuts me to the core It's as though life isn't living No heart does it possess The silence of the spirit Is unbounded hollowness A heart that's shroud in silence Is unhealthy for the soul The sweetest song, if left unsung Is a worthless piece of gold Elizabeth Santos |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
LIZ this is beautiful, its my favorite piece of yours, if not ive read in this forum i hope you dont mind im printing it out, its found itself so close to me already, Congradulations, on such a masterpiece |
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Femme's Father Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 58Carrollton, TX, USA |
Mercy me!!! I can hardly believe-- There is no end- only beginning you see.. Out of the fathom-less depths-- To the vastness of the sea... Ever flowing- ever growing-- Even upward ever still.. He's taking you-He's moulding you-- To do His perfect will!! God Bless.. I just jotted this down for you; Liz, as I heard it come on celestial wings. A true child of the spirit I would say... James David "The heart that sails on spirit wings..with joy & peace will always sing"... |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas |
Liz, it was beautiful. I actually considered penning a reply. it was there in my mind as I read your work. |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
Lovely, Elizabeth, although I do feel that a song 'unsung' may be better than no song at all. "Stop this day and night with me and you shall possess the origin of all poems, You shall possess the good of the earth and sun (there are millions of suns left,) You shall no longer take things at second or third hand, nor look through the eyes of the dead, nor feed on the spectres in books, You shall not look through my eyes either, nor take things from me, You shall listen to all sides and filter them from your self." >Walt Whitman, Song of Myself. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LIZ, the last stanza is worth its weight in gold. The entire poem is a jewel. To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Silence is not always golden, is it? Well done, Elizabeth!  Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, I hear your cry , I'm on the fly, I'll get my horse and lance that lie. I'll be you knight, I'll fight your fight Just point this dragon out in light. I cannot stand your sadness tone It shivers me down to the bone. Just ask of me your wish of wish. And I'll make your wish my wish. *L* Sy The poem is exquisite |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I appreciate all of your comments, and wasn't expecting such positive response on this little poem. Thank you! Liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, Please don't worry about the tone The source of these words is unknown Actually it happened long ago With a father that I loved so I had gone through the fires of hell But couldn't to my parents tell When learned the truth, not a single word No interest in my life I heard The silence was a deafening sound A silence heard the whole world round And ever since I have taught my own To tell me whatever trouble they've sewn And I will love them just the same So you see, no dragons to be slain But this poem could apply to other things In fact it has an applicable ring The bottom line is that people should talk And never at communication balk You should try to open up your soul That's what makes a being whole Liz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This, Liz is one of the most beautiful poems you have written yet. Mind if I keep it? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Psst ! I love this. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kamla and Marge, If you two like it, I'm happy! Sy, I don't openly talk about my dragons. Liz |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The entire poem is beautiful... and the last verse a poem in itself!! Well done! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Elizabeth, this is truly beautiful!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Suthern, You know, i think we think alike. Thank you Dark angel, If you think its beautiful, then it probably is. Liz |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Elizabeth, this is stunning...it left me with tears in my eyes, as I can relate all to well to this piece. It is exquisite, and I'm definitely keeping it. Thank you so much for sharing it here. It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Elizabeth, The heart doesn't know when to move on, but lingers with the hope of relationships turning around...Poignant, beautiful piece. Corinne |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This was a truly poignant poem - so beautifully written. I fear I may be on the other side of this. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Caroline, Corinne, LngJhnAg, It seems like several poets understand this poem. Must have had a similar experience. Caroline, you may have it. Thank you all for your remarks Liz |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, true and powerful words here. There is no worth to a song left unsung...especially of the heart. Good poem. Michael |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I enjoyed your poem!!!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Michael and vandana, Thank you both very much. I'm getting the feeling most people know the power of silence. Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
How beautiful |
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Sonny Junior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 29Schenectady, NY, USA |
Your poem was very elegantly written and conveys your emotion untainted. The purity of your writing serves to enhance the power of your message. It's sincerity is unquestionable; it's beauty heart breaking. |
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Sir Real Junior Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 17 |
most excellent poem. "It's as though life isn't living No heart does it possess" I love this part..... richard |
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Quest New Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 9 |
I have unspoken those very words, but I'm trying to change. Your poem touched me. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Hoot, Thanks, you're sweet Sonny, Thoughtful comments from a young poet Much appreciated by an old one Liz Sir real So glad you liked the poem Quest, I often think, if I had spoken up, a less travelled path I could have taken. But I've now learned to speak my heart, and that has made all the difference. Liz |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Ahhh...Beautiful indeed Elizabeth.... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Pepper, Thanks for your comment and for your poems I will be sending you a poem as soon as I have a chance Liz |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
So many times those that love us do it in ways that others do not. What I mean is that they think they say they love you and they do....but not the same way you or I might. Doesn't mean that they don't just cause they don't say it. Seems easy to me to say "I love you"....but to others it is the hardest thing in the world to do. This is by far my favorite poem of yours. You have a talent your father did not. You are able to comunicate with words to the masses. And you do it with flair. And I know he has love for you....and must be proud in his own special way. < !signature--> Share what you are for you are what you share [This message has been edited by First__Knight (edited 12-20-1999).] |
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sraet Junior Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 31 |
Liz, this is so very good, I do see this side of the dilema, it is still so difficult to change. With your permission I'd love to print this out and keep it for a reminder to how it feels to be on the "needing to hear it" side. Thanks again for sharing with me, |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
This poem is so beautiful, It's words ring so true, If it is fact and not fiction, I hope that happiness, love and contentment soon come to you. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
First Knight, straet and Moonsine, I appreciate all of your comments It's amazing what my children tell me about themselves, having been always urged to be open, but then I learn as time goes on, those things they didn't, for fear of my feelings or reaction. I guess we all do that, but when someone is in distress, how much they need those words of love! Liz |
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mc Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 67México |
Liz, What a master piece YOU ARE!!! this is GREAT. |
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myslinky Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 27 |
Silence can drive me insane! This poem is beautiful and heartfelt. I loved the contrast between worthless and gold in the last stanza. YOu have a blessed heart. Words like violence Break the silence M.L. Gore |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
myslinky, I used to be on the other side of this. Now I know better Thanks, Liz Thank you mc! I'm glad you liked it Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-20-1999).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand this well |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I didn't read this one before Lizzie, and I am not sure what went straight to my heart your poem or your comment that you know I know so well.  Yes, you sure are one darn good poetess dear lady. A weenie bump up because I am down here and might as well right?  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I enjoy your poems ARCTIC WIND |
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