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RSEvans
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since 1999-10-23
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Tulsa, OK, USA

0 posted 1999-12-16 11:50 AM


The Christmas rush is on it seems
Judging by the traffic on the street
Greeting me with high beams
My vision they defeat.

We sally forth to Wal-Mart
In search of Christmas gifts
And always there we realize
Something is amiss.

Children running to and fro
Parentless 'twould seem
Stringing things from aisle to aisle
Leaving toys in between.

And then a new question arises
Looking through the clothing there.
Nothing in human sizes
For our relatives to wear?

Perhaps a gift of stemware
Surely that would please?
But all the stems are broken there
On a shelf around my knees.

Look!  There's the thing they long for
Sitting on a shelf.
Oh Drat!  Now it's been taken
By an ungrateful elf.

What to buy now what to buy?
I search somehow in vain
No matter how hard I try
And constantly search my brain.

Surely there's another store
A shopping Utopia somewhere
Where children aren't allowed indoor
And gifts abound like air.

Mr. Walton if you're watching
From your haven up above
I'm sure you must be laughing
As these people push and shove.

So I'll give you thanks this season
For this abyss you've created
For without it we could reason
Somewhere else we hated. < !signature-->

 Knowlege tempered by wisdom...Wisdom tamed by youth.

[This message has been edited by RSEvans (edited 12-16-1999).]

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Iloveit
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121
NM
1 posted 1999-12-16 12:06 PM


lol, no kidding, my daughter WORKS at walmart so I am sure she would agree ten fold....sigh...the perfect gift....is there such a thing?
good job   oh....and nice pic, nice to *see* the man behind the words  

[This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 12-16-1999).]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 1999-12-16 01:08 PM


LOL and not LOL....why did you have to remind me   I hate shopping and detest Christmas shopping...think perhaps I can just write them all a poem??
Denise
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3 posted 1999-12-16 01:44 PM


I think the best gift is a gift certificate! Let someone else deal with all the madness! hehehehehe   Great poem!

Very nice pic, RS, glad to finally see you!


 Denise



Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
4 posted 1999-12-16 01:48 PM


You have captured the essence of why my feet very rarely wander in Wal Mart. But I got a great deal on a Pentax there!
Loved the poem!
Liz

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
5 posted 1999-12-16 02:01 PM


Ah yes!  Nothing like it in the world!  Makes me want to hurry up and get the heck outta there!  Argh!  Just a couple of nights ago, I go in there for 1 item - I saw empty shelves, broken leftovers, and I'm not kidding you - at LEAST 50 carts with weary shoppers leaning on them, standing in the Layaway line !!  Gads!  It must have been payday!  I was so thankful I hadn't used Layaway this year!  What madness indeed!  I got my item, and ran for the nearest exit !!!!  This poem of yours brought back all those horrific images!  LOL  Thanks for sharing!  I too, like the photo!  Gees, you clean up nicely brother!  ROFL      I've always seen you in jeans and t-shirt !  

 - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF


PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
6 posted 1999-12-16 04:13 PM


Glad to finally see the man behind the words and nice pic too lol. I remember when Wal Mart was my favorite store to hang out in. I went there the day after Thanksgiving and people were fighting over shopping carts!! I was mortified that these otherwise normally sane people would fight over these things. Some lady (I use the term loosely) actually hit another one with her handbag. I got one of those little crates with handles and got my stuff and got out of there. I went back a week later and you're right...unsupervised kids everywhere and broken items and clothes strung all over the place including in sporting goods. Strange place to see a negligee. Haven't been back since. Maybe I'll go again in July after the rush is over lol.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA
7 posted 1999-12-16 05:28 PM


Attention Walmart shoppers , Disgruntled poet in isle three, security , SECURITY !

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (edited 12-16-1999).]

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
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8 posted 1999-12-16 06:16 PM


very good yes i wish it was all over i gotta be an elf for the kids this year dont ask
Beri
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since 1999-11-25
Posts 149

9 posted 1999-12-16 06:46 PM


Very good poem indeed RS.  It brought a smile to my lips that is for sure.  Sad to think though just how true this is!!!!

 If you love something, set it free, if it comes back to you, its meant to be...

Poet deVine
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10 posted 1999-12-16 07:22 PM


You have also described MY WalMart! I've decided I'll pay higher prices just to NEVER shop there during the busy time (and I've tried from 6 am to 11 pm to find a quiet time.. there is none!)...so I'm giving gift certificates for movies instead of WalMart purchased items! Good poem!  

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11 posted 1999-12-16 07:34 PM


RSEvans -
My favorite forward movement
~Sally forth~ ... doesn't it just
say it all?  Great job.

Personally, I like Christmas shopping
almost everywhere.  I find parents
responsible for their offspring ...
and I always have a great big smile
for weary store workers.
I love the hustle and the bustle
of Wal-Mart ... quite a cross-walk
of people there.
On Aisle 4 ... the 'ghost' of
Sam Walton, one of the finest men
it was ever my pleasure to meet.
He loved to go to his own stores
and observe the people shopping.
Shame that now security cameras
take his watch.
Great look at the commercial side
of Christmas.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



MADDavid
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since 1999-12-04
Posts 26
Carrollton, TX, USA
12 posted 1999-12-16 08:38 PM


The hustle and bustle of Wal-Mart.  What would we all do without it.  The best prices in town for sure and that's why everyone is there to save money.  Just wait until they get on the internet and we will all be able to sit at home and visit their web site.  I for one can't wait.  We will not have to worry about getting a parking space or getting ran over by the crowd.  Mr. Sam is probably smiling from above because he has already thought of all this you know...

 Shine a light and darkness disappears.

RSEvans
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since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147
Tulsa, OK, USA
13 posted 1999-12-17 12:55 PM


Thanks everybody for your comments on my pic.  It's a wedding photo from (should I give my age?) 6 years ago.  I agree with you Marge, that Sam Walton was a fine individual.  I find it disturbing that so few of the existing Wal-Mart executives display his verve and attitude toward the shoppers.  Still, if there's something we need we'll drive 20 minutes out of our way to look at Wal-Mart rather than spend the extra 10-75 cents per item at our local stores.  I do have to kind of wonder about these poor local shop owners that we tend to neglect.  Everyone please...Have a Merry Christmas.
passing shadows
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14 posted 2005-04-15 06:13 AM


oh...this is good!
Artic Wind
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15 posted 2007-11-12 06:54 PM


lol, i enjoyed this poem, MERRY CHRISTMAS

ARCTIC WIND

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