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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

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0 posted 1999-12-16 06:56 AM

Never again must the fruition of beauty,
waiting for the propitious moment of its birth,
withhold pleasure solely for the sake of duty;
instead must it strive to show its own inner worth.

By nefarious misdeed can vengeance carry
sinful thoughts of power taken to extreme end,
into scalding pits of hate which trap the wary
and loathe those whose faithless nature is to pretend.

©1999 DreamEvil 1999

Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

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1 posted 1999-12-16 09:08 AM

Wow Scott...Powerful words my friend. Well done.

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

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Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 1999-12-16 09:29 AM

Very powerful

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

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Sitting in Michael's Lap

3 posted 1999-12-16 09:33 AM

You have captured the two extremes here -- the light and the dark faces of humanity. Presenting them juxtaposed as such makes for an intriguing read ...

--Kess

You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

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Arkansas

4 posted 1999-12-16 02:38 PM

Um wow Scott....let me drag out Webster's and look up a few of these magnificent words, then I'll be able to give you a better reply, for I must admit, part of this went over my chemically blonde head !

From what I can gather, I find this superb and deeply written from the depths of your thoughts.....And wow, what thoughts you harbor!!

- - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

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5 posted 1999-12-16 03:05 PM

Random, dark one?

LOL - then your mind must harbor many such thoughts!

Excellent, well written words.

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

6 posted 1999-12-16 07:11 PM

This is good! For the fact there are only 2 stanzas, the lines seem so clean and full of feeling! I guess I can't explain it... I only know I like it.

Seaangel
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since 1999-07-27

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7 posted 1999-12-16 07:32 PM

Interesting, Dreamevil; I'll have to ponder a while to figure out exactly what you mean...powerful stuff.

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

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8 posted 1999-12-17 04:16 AM

The poem is written entirely in alexandrine verse. Each line is written in hexameter (12 syllables=6feet). Further the stresses are reversed so the accented syllable comes first and is followed by the soft syllable.

Usually they are used as ending lines in poetry such as the Spensarian stanza which uses a rhyming triplet to end the stanza. The final line is an alexandrine.

It was moderately difficult to write an entire stanza in reverse.

Thank you much.

Rod
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since 1999-12-08

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9 posted 1999-12-17 04:27 AM

All that! Well I must say you did it superbly!
It was certainly worth the effort.
Powerful indeed! - Loved it!

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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10 posted 1999-12-17 05:05 AM

WOW!!! Scott, very powerful indeed. Loved it

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Christopher

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Purgatorial Incarceration

11 posted 1999-12-18 03:19 AM

Nailed it you did my friend!

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