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andy
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0 posted 12-16-1999 01:53 AM       View Profile for andy   Email andy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for andy

This is by my 11 year old brother and Severn's surrogate brother, but he wrote it when he was six. It has been stuck on the kitchen wall since then, and I FINALLY convinced him to post it! >Seaangel

~*~*~

Autumn leaves flipping down,
twirling, swirling,
round and round.

Autumn leaves deciduous and evergreen,
golden brown and red and yellow.

Autumn leaves covering the town,
covering the whole city.

Autumn leaves making patterns,
on the other trees.

Autumn leaves, tickle and
crunch under my feet.

Autumn leaves rustling, gently
on the ground.

Autumn leaves nestling together,
with a slight cuddly cuddle.

Autumn leaves fluttering to the crackling,
crunchy, prickly ground.
  
Autumn leaves flipping down,
twirling, swirling,
round and round.

By andy


© Copyright 1999 andy - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 12-16-1999 02:20 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

big   's here oman he was only 6 and now he has doubled his age almost yuh wow i love it envious of the kid my first poem was entitled walt's rap (p u!!!!) this was wonderful!
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 12-16-1999 02:36 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

What a beautiful poem! But somebody's pulling my leg about the age of the poet!
Don't think I could have done better.
I liked all the sounds of the poem. Made me feel like I was walking through the leaves.
I certainly hope we hear more from this young poet.
Good work, Andy!
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3 posted 12-16-1999 06:29 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

WOW !
Andy, this poem is DANDY !
You keep it up young man.
This is just a great piece of work.
Autumn leaves are such a favorite of mine.
Have a wonderful MERRY CHRISTMAS.
You are just too cool !

~*Marge*~


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Pepper
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4 posted 12-16-1999 06:46 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

This is a Wonderful poem Andy!!  
And to think you wrote this when you were six......WOW!! You're a natural...lots of talent here....
Welcome to Passions and I hope you will be sharing more of your work with us!!
                        

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!


Martie
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5 posted 12-16-1999 10:15 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

What a great poem. I love it! I could hear it and see it.  You have a great talent with words, Andy.  Keep writing, okay.  It is a wonderful and fun thing to do. Have a great Christmas summertime.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 12-16-1999 12:09 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Andy this is a wonderful poem...but please do tell me someone helped you with this one. I do not know of any 6 year olds that know what the word "deciduous" means. Heck I must have been 16 when I learned that one. Which just happens to have been two short years ago. (okay guys, he doesn't know any better, he's new here  )
Welcome to passions  
Denise
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7 posted 12-16-1999 01:25 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Welcome to Passions, Andy! This is a great poem! I can't believe you wrote this when you were only six! Are you like a genius or something?! Very very nice! Please post your other poems here too, as I am sure you must have quite a few!

 Denise


andy
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8 posted 12-16-1999 06:47 PM       View Profile for andy   Email andy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for andy

Thanks everyone heaps    
I learned DECIDUOUS in a spelling test for that topic so I can say my teacher helped, not to mention Severn for spell-checking it, and Seaangel for helping me put it on.
                  
Nan
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9 posted 12-17-1999 08:00 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Andy - You'd better write more.... You have a knack for poetry.. You used some pretty good imagery here....

Nice Job..!!!
Mike
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10 posted 12-17-1999 01:23 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Andy... well done.  by the way.. what the heck does deciduous mean?
Irie
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11 posted 12-17-1999 02:44 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

GREAT JOB kiddo! Look forward to seeing more of your talent. Keep it up.  )
RainbowGirl
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12 posted 12-17-1999 02:58 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Andy: This is one heck of a bright 6 year old, (did older brother help..*g*) likes to be observant too...Great poem and great subject..

HUGS

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...


Severn
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13 posted 12-17-1999 06:19 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Andy - I told you I was right about the spelling!!!! Hehehehe.

Of course you know I think you're a great poet so keep writing, little surro brother...

 
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