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The Jackal
Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 1999-12-16 01:35 AM


i dont think you like me pretty girl
i dont fit your mold
and your checking your hair
in my eyes
once again..
shutting me off
from your world
why the hell should i care?
so i know i dont fit in there
your perfect little hate
your perfect time
that you make me wait
what if you mean everything
nothing and anything
despite all the carnage
i still flow to you
whats exactly my problem
its time like this
when i know thats its true
my faith is falling
when i say
or scream
i do love hating you..



 

© Copyright 1999 John Dixon - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
1 posted 1999-12-16 03:20 AM


You have captured her personality and a whole relationship in just a few lines.
This is wonderful!
Liz

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 1999-12-17 06:02 AM


Powerful words - and a great capturing. Well done!
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
3 posted 2005-04-15 06:15 AM


yep...I relate
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2007-11-12 06:55 PM


I enjoyed your poem, but i would like to say, how did you come up with that name

ARCTIC WIND

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