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O, distant life...

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Master
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0 posted 12-15-1999 11:01 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

O, distant life, demanding more attention,
Abandon me, so I may see my dear.
And take with thee the ever granted tension
And make the irksome troubles disappear.
God, cleanse my mind of thoughts it often sees
And let it rest, in the embrace of void.
Erase the letters, numbers and degrees--
The company by which I am employed.
Instead, allow me to imagine that Iím warm
And undisturbed by fierce and brute December
And let the vacuum of my mind take on her form,
With which informed, my mind shall remember.
Into the vacant thought, when thought does part,
Iíll pour her spirit from the abyss of my heart



 I fell in love and kept on falling

© Copyright 1999 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 12-15-1999 11:05 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Dwelling too much on the future can surely cause much distress in the present! Very good Master.  

 Denise


Master
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2 posted 12-16-1999 06:30 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you Denise!
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 12-16-1999 09:34 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

wonderful work my young poet friend  
Master
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4 posted 12-16-1999 08:56 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you Hoot, my young at heart, adult friend! *S*
poetFemmeFatale
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5 posted 12-19-1999 12:07 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

You sure have a beautiful way with words!  I love your style of rhyme....Flows exquisitely!  I must say, I'll be looking for more from you to read!  I am an avid fan after just one bite!  ROFL    

 - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF

Master
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6 posted 12-19-1999 12:18 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you poetFemmeFatale and what a beautiful name! I'm glad you liked this one, I just started writing sonnets and it's been fun. It's a great style indeed, but I often have problems with the iambic meter. Anyway, thank you for responding and keep biting *S*!
Nan
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7 posted 12-19-1999 08:24 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I'm so glad to see you venturing into the world of sonnets.... You're doing a great job...

Think we could convince you to try pantoums? villanelles? sestinas???
Master
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8 posted 12-19-1999 10:36 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Well, I've tried villanelles, that didn't work. As for the other two I don't even know the style.

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