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seesage
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since 1999-12-15
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0 posted 1999-12-15 12:50 PM


My thoughts were decisive and clear when not in trouble
but complications always confused my rational
temtations were my downfall
only if i would of saw that which i proably did see but not so evident
which i do see now
will i lose again like i always do
**** no is what i scream in my state after my mistake
but
so far
its always happened again
the temptation
the clouding of my actions  
my one downfall
my one weakness and flaw
so simple is seems to overcome afterwards
why is it this simplicity couldn't be as simple as it is now
tommorow of later I guess I'll see when the trials start all over again.



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Nan
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1 posted 1999-12-15 07:50 AM


I like your final couplet, seesage.... and welcome to our Passionate family....
Severn
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2 posted 1999-12-15 02:56 PM


Echoing the welcome...

  

Sven
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3 posted 1999-12-15 04:27 PM


Welcome. . .

Good words. . . strong and deep. . .

Looking forward to seeing more. . .

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



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