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Poertree
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since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359
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0 posted 1999-12-13 03:30 PM


There is an unsettled hunger,
There is a void unfilled,
Unsatisfied.

Now we talk in quick short bursts,
Maybe afraid of more,
Maybe we already know too much,
Maybe afraid of what's behind the door.

Staccato words we use,
Quick reassurances that we both exist,
Then away to the safety of undemanding friends,
Where what we are does not intrude
upon the delightful nonsenses
that like-minded girls can beautifully make.

There were days when we could do that,
when unfamiliarity and newness
pulled our chatter along
in wild enthusiasm.

Now we guess or know it all.
Now we deal in the boring certainty
of longer friendship,
of problems made and solved;
of knowledge.

Do I want it back?
Do you?

Would the effort to be
something new and different
repay the fizz of light that might
flare up again?

I can turn back time,
but would the repeated hours
fly with the same spontaneous
gaiety of before?

So, what of all we invested?
Has evolution halted or
can we grow?
Do we stagnate to extinction or
wander, satisfied, this flat plain?

Am I happy with us?
Are you?

What are we to each other?
Why do I write this
if you are nothing to me?

Are we fine?
Tell.

© Copyright 1999 Poertree - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
1 posted 1999-12-13 03:40 PM


A beautiful poem on the art of communication,
Very well written and smooth flowing. I enjoyed it
Liz

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

2 posted 1999-12-13 03:42 PM


This, dear Poertree, is great!
Come here more often OK?!

K

Poertree
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since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359
UK
3 posted 1999-12-13 03:58 PM


~smile~ You are both very kind.  And Severn you know where I am  , but maybe you're right maybe there are times not to think too much, but to just write .. this piece took 10 mins and was from the heart, usually I take 10 days of analytical agonising per poem ... back soon

Philip

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
4 posted 1999-12-13 09:36 PM


This is great!

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~



hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 1999-12-13 09:52 PM


Excellent   "Staccato words we use," what a line!

sraet
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 31

6 posted 1999-12-15 08:11 AM


Another great post I somehow missed the first time around.  I loved the line:
"Why do I write this
if you are nothing to me?  

jbouder
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since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534
Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash
7 posted 1999-12-16 11:41 AM


This is very good, Philip.  "Do we stagnate to extinction or wander, satisfied, this flat plain?" is an excellent line.  But you shouldn't feel as though you have to hide your work from me in Open Poetry (you know I don't get in here often).    Ten minutes of honesty is often worth 10 hours of toil (you have NO idea how much it hurt me to say that).


 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther


Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
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8 posted 2000-10-07 01:06 AM


Philip--I have wondered this same thing, but didn't realize it until I read your poem and never could have said it so well.
Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

9 posted 2000-10-07 07:49 AM


Hmm yes some really interesting thoughts here Philip  
A terrific poem indeed  

Maree

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
10 posted 2003-01-01 04:45 AM


yeah....this is what i feel today
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