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Poertree
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0 posted 12-13-1999 03:30 PM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Poertree

There is an unsettled hunger,
There is a void unfilled,
Unsatisfied.

Now we talk in quick short bursts,
Maybe afraid of more,
Maybe we already know too much,
Maybe afraid of what's behind the door.

Staccato words we use,
Quick reassurances that we both exist,
Then away to the safety of undemanding friends,
Where what we are does not intrude
upon the delightful nonsenses
that like-minded girls can beautifully make.

There were days when we could do that,
when unfamiliarity and newness
pulled our chatter along
in wild enthusiasm.

Now we guess or know it all.
Now we deal in the boring certainty
of longer friendship,
of problems made and solved;
of knowledge.

Do I want it back?
Do you?

Would the effort to be
something new and different
repay the fizz of light that might
flare up again?

I can turn back time,
but would the repeated hours
fly with the same spontaneous
gaiety of before?

So, what of all we invested?
Has evolution halted or
can we grow?
Do we stagnate to extinction or
wander, satisfied, this flat plain?

Am I happy with us?
Are you?

What are we to each other?
Why do I write this
if you are nothing to me?

Are we fine?
Tell.
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Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 12-13-1999 03:40 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

A beautiful poem on the art of communication,
Very well written and smooth flowing. I enjoyed it
Liz
Severn
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2 posted 12-13-1999 03:42 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

This, dear Poertree, is great!
Come here more often OK?!

K
Poertree
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3 posted 12-13-1999 03:58 PM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

~smile~ You are both very kind.  And Severn you know where I am  , but maybe you're right maybe there are times not to think too much, but to just write .. this piece took 10 mins and was from the heart, usually I take 10 days of analytical agonising per poem ... back soon

Philip
Echo Rhayne
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4 posted 12-13-1999 09:36 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

This is great!

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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5 posted 12-13-1999 09:52 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Excellent   "Staccato words we use," what a line!
sraet
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6 posted 12-15-1999 08:11 AM       View Profile for sraet   Email sraet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sraet

Another great post I somehow missed the first time around.  I loved the line:
"Why do I write this
if you are nothing to me?  
jbouder
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since 09-18-99
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7 posted 12-16-1999 11:41 AM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

This is very good, Philip.  "Do we stagnate to extinction or wander, satisfied, this flat plain?" is an excellent line.  But you shouldn't feel as though you have to hide your work from me in Open Poetry (you know I don't get in here often).    Ten minutes of honesty is often worth 10 hours of toil (you have NO idea how much it hurt me to say that).


 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther

Martie
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8 posted 10-07-2000 01:06 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Philip--I have wondered this same thing, but didn't realize it until I read your poem and never could have said it so well.
Dark Angel
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9 posted 10-07-2000 07:49 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Hmm yes some really interesting thoughts here Philip  
A terrific poem indeed  

Maree
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10 posted 01-01-2003 04:45 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

yeah....this is what i feel today
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