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Rod
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0 posted 1999-12-13 04:09 AM




                                                   WOMAN
                                                
Time suspended........self reflected.........mirror on the wall;
Within your naked form grows warm desire to bare your soul.
And as your misty eyes perchance allow your gaze to fall
Would you incline the thief of time to give back what he stole?

The symmetry - that curve of figure, one time blessed with youthful vigour
Now, perhaps, those hourglass contours seem less well defined;
Where nature’s yearly course has clashed with life’s demanding rigour
Your soul alone retains your beauty in it’s timeless mind.

Ah! Sweet forest of delight, soft secret garden of creation;
Within your warm allure is formed the seed of life renewed.
But damn him straight to hell who shall abuse it with elation,
For sure the hand of vengeance counts his evil deeds accrued.

How sharp was barbed the arrow that has pierced your childhood’s
dreams;
Illusions shipwrecked on the storm-bound oceans of your life.
Oh, woman! that your love may conquer nightmare’s chilling screams,
And find safe haven from betrayal’s deadly knife!

How diverse - the winds of fate where chance has dealt your hand,
If  beauty, poise and grace elude your outward glance;
Then count yourself no less a part of all that nature planned;
Compassion’s heartfelt understanding highlights your romance.

What pen shall  e’er encompass all your wishes and desires?
What man can truly comprehend  the longings of your heart?
Who can know Utopia’s dream that oft your mind conspires
To shield your child from evil -  and its wicked poisoned dart?

Your life shall have its pain and grief and sorrow,
Wise hearts still get broken, and well-meaning fingers burned;
Surely then, your sun shall rise tomorrow
Newly borne on wings of lessons learned.                   ©Rod Walford 1999
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© Copyright 1999 Rod Walford - All Rights Reserved
First__Knight
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1 posted 1999-12-13 04:16 AM


The last four lines speak so well.....Another great from you Rod  

 Share what you are for you are what you share


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2 posted 1999-12-13 04:19 AM


Rod -
Beautiful phrases set so lovely.
Exquisite lines to captivate ...
and they have done so.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Rod
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3 posted 1999-12-13 04:31 AM


Just for the record - I do hope this poem will not offend any of our ladies! My wife hates it (she thinks everyone will think that I "modelled" it on her! - not true I swear!) She sees the word "cellulite" in every line, although I would never use such a word!
It actually started off as an attempt by me to look at life through the eyes of a woman - then halfway through I began to realise that was a dangerous thing for a man to try,  ) so it ended up the way you see it now.

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4 posted 1999-12-13 04:43 AM


Tell her not to worry ... we women all know that we are more than our bodies.
The body may lure a man ... but our minds and our loving hearts are what keep them !


*And like nature's time-clock doesn't work on men too ... just sooner !
Lose no sleep ... no offense taken here.


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Severn
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5 posted 1999-12-13 05:59 AM


Offensive? Not likely!
More of a tribute to our 'kind' than anything.
Fantastic, every line is a delight.

(Go Kiwis!!!)

K

Nan
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6 posted 1999-12-13 06:40 AM


Rod - This isn't at all offensive... As a matter of fact, it's exactly what I needed to read this morning... Thank you....
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 1999-12-13 09:40 AM


Offensive...indeed not, it makes my thoughts soar  
Pepper
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8 posted 1999-12-13 07:02 PM


I too thought it a wonderful piece Rod  .....

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!



caroline
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9 posted 1999-12-13 07:21 PM


I found it exquisite, and quite the compliment to women. I love it!  Thank you for sharing this  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 1999-12-13 07:25 PM


Rod,
This is beautifully written, and is in fact complimentary.
Liz

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