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Theraaven
Junior Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 11


0 posted 1999-12-13 12:14 PM


I can't stop this scribblin hand from jackhammerin across this page

About an old man with a wormy beard talking to his kingdom
Pushing it in a cart down the dirty veiny streets he calls home
He sleeps on wet cardboard soaked in light under a doorway
You and I staring ahead not knowing what to say.

I cant stop this scribblin hand from cryin across this page

I remember you sat in bed your back against the headboard
My head in your lap as you read to me enveloped and reassured
But today melts and tomorrow keeps sliding towards forever
I had forgotten how easily forever crumbles into never

I can't stop this scribblin hand from dancin across this page

For ballons quietly smirking over aluminum foil lakes
When leaves change their clothes proudly and the nakedness they make
For slinky silhouettes in reeded meadows suggesting allure
For waves that spit thick foamy presents when invited to the shore

I cant stop this scribblin hand............



[This message has been edited by Theraaven (edited 12-13-1999).]

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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 1999-12-13 12:19 PM


This is wonderful, Theraaven! Very nice! Say, if your arm gets tired, can I borrow that hand? My pages are blank lately?!  

 Denise



poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
2 posted 1999-12-13 12:24 PM


Oh gees!  First I want to say a big Welcome!  This is the first of your poetry I've read as far as I know...and I simply loved this!  How unique - and wow, do you have a way with painting an image in the reader's mind as he/she reads!!  Fabulous!  With each stanza I read, I could actually see and FEEL what was going on!  It's been a long time since someone has been able to paint in my mind like you just did!  You just have to post more!  I'll certainly be looking for ya!  Bravo !!!  

 - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF


WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
3 posted 1999-12-13 12:52 PM


What wonderful imagery you use! You do paint quite the picture.

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Jesus is the reason for the season


Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 1999-12-13 02:13 AM


Fabulous - I get the sincerity knocked right into my stomach - awesome.

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