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Macbeth 4 (a sonnet)

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Master
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0 posted 12-12-1999 07:18 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Be still my heart, your beating is too loud
It may awake the Gods, who’ve missed my deed
Instead, beat very calmly, make the pale proud
And pave uncertainty with dense concrete
Let eyes reflect not what they saw tonight
But, rather shine with glory that they’ve chased
Let time be counterfeited in my sight
And happiness be mimicked on my face
Fair heart, digest your deepest inner feelings
As if a cyclone that consumes brave ships
Let no debris arise in any dealings
The safest lie is that which always sleeps
By doing so, don’t let observers see
The secret that is known to you and me



 I fell in love and kept on falling



[This message has been edited by Master (edited 12-13-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 12-12-1999 08:18 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Another fantastic piece, Master. I've tried to write sonnets but have not yet succeeded (they're hard!). Liked it much!

 Nail to the mast her holy flag,
Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes

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2 posted 12-12-1999 08:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is so beautiful, Master!

 Denise


Master
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3 posted 12-12-1999 11:20 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you Elizabeth, this is the first time I've written a sonnet and it didn't seem that hard. Give it another try!
Denise, again thanks for your comments and suggestions!
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Wonderful work Master....you talents amaze me as I have told you so many times.  
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5 posted 12-13-1999 12:19 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

Very nice work, M. (enjoying having everyone call you Master?   ).

 Jim

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6 posted 12-13-1999 05:48 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Sonnets are one of my favorite formats, M... This is pretty darned good for your first effort - A couple of very minor meter tucks to smooth out your pentameter and it will be perfectomundo!!!.....

Keep writing these - You're really good at it...
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7 posted 12-13-1999 09:38 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you everybody!
And Jim, I'm loving it!!!
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