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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 12-12-1999 05:12 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

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A pall of innocence waits in hiding,
Waiting the symbol of sole permit.
Waits in the shadows always savoring,
Each day and night awaits commit.

It walks in the mist,
Insists on the light,
Prays and focuses,
With all its might.

For the visions of reason to point the way.
To hear an answer for something to say.
A right or a wrong all the madness in view.
To sooth the decisions it has to think through.

So it stands in mock,
Pretends its a rock.
Says, it's in stone,
In myself alone.

So the pall of innocents goes back in hiding
Goes back in the shadows, back to abiding.

© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Eboni
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1 posted 12-12-1999 05:20 PM       View Profile for Eboni   Email Eboni   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eboni

THAT IS A REALLY NEAT POEM!

 Eboni Banks
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2 posted 12-12-1999 05:57 PM       View Profile for Femme's Father   Email Femme's Father   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Femme's Father

This is deep.. If it is relating to innocence or shyness, I can get the meaning after reading twice slowly. I like thoughts that are hidden in parables like this. It is a gift that is more rare and has an intrigueing mysteriousness about it! It challenges my mind to dive deeper into the realm of deciphering and seeking the thoughts of the person sharing. Jesus used this type of structure in the Bible, ie ..He
spoke not unto them except in parables...
like very much...may we have more?
James David




 A man's heart often cannot see the light - because of the darkness of it's own motives.... - James David
Severn
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3 posted 12-12-1999 06:19 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Does this is some way relate to your other poem 'The Rock'?
I like this very much - though it teases my mind (but that is a good thing!)

I really like the structure - long and short verses.

Well done again, Sy.

K
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 12-12-1999 07:28 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Ebonie,
Well I try to be as neat as I can.
Only fooling, thank you for the read.
Femme's Father,
I am almost in shock you recognized the parable effect. I usually feel like I'm
writing to myself. The people here are kind and good and I enjoy reading and writing with them. Your analysis was correct, thank you for the read and comment.
Severn,
you are ver astute. *L*
Elizabeth
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5 posted 12-12-1999 08:52 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Very deep, Seymour.
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6 posted 12-12-1999 09:01 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very deep. You are a person in touch with the inner self. Great job, Seymour!

 Denise


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7 posted 12-12-1999 09:14 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Deep Seymore, but I do like this  
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 12-13-1999 01:19 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
As long as you can swim it's not to deep.
Denise,
Thanks for the great,
I think your great too.
Hoot,
Glad you like, *L*
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 12-13-1999 01:34 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
  This is a poem that is relevant to me, and so well written. Interesting verse.
Liz
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10 posted 12-13-1999 03:37 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Excellent Seymour. . . wish I could begin the philosophical debate. . .



 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Martie
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11 posted 12-13-1999 05:11 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Well Seymour, I have read this several times and am enthralled by it--the meaning simmers before me then slithers away.  

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 12-13-1999 06:18 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
Sometimes a parables aim
Is to drive you insane.
I missed you Liz
and miss your beautiful poetry.
*L* Sy
Sven,
I thank you for the wonderful comment.
Martie,
Didn't mean to send a snake to play,
But a parable can effect you that way.
*L* Sy "Enthralled," that's a five dollar
word, thank you much.

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 12-13-1999).]
Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 12-13-1999 07:33 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy
Insane , perhaps, I have gone
But I still know the right from wrong
My madness is uncomparable
But please don't blame it on the parable!
Liz
 
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