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Awakely sleeping
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Awakely sleeping |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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Dreamed this place of awakely sleeping has captured me who holds the cup of fate in a coolly tipping hand? Choice is a slumbering word flushed red a dormant beauty with no reviving kiss I taste truths bitter-mouthed and swallow so night blinded the moon is just a firefly while heart-clouded I sleep through walking where is my waking? [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-11-1999).] |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
Top notch Severn... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Great poem, Severn. What an awesome title, too. Loved this one. Michael |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Splendid piece Severn....  A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
Loved this one Severn, very thought provocing. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very nice, Severn! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"Choice is a slumbering word", wow! Severn you are so full--you bleed originality. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Your wake is in the wooing, The doing and pursuing. Enjoyed the poem. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
UK - beaming smile. Michael - glad you could relate! *S* -  LB - thanks! Denise - thankyou too! Martie - lets hope it doesn't kill me one day - LOL. Thankyou my friend. Sy - yes, it will take a lot to woo this one. K |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"..... the cup of fate/in a coolly tipping hand" Good stuff, Sev..... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A poet's poet, that's for sure! I meant what I said about the invitation! Liz |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, lady! You wanna buy a magazine....or create one? Another A for excellence, Severn. To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world. |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
Lovely, Severn. Also kinda depressing. Choice is awake, even if only in moments.... I would love to see a contradictory poem about this from you!!  |
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Seward New Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 4 |
A fabulous poem. Perfect wandering material. But no reviving kiss? Can choice slumber on - even as the words which surround it breathe warmth into it? |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Severn - Quite an awakening here. You are a remarkable young woman. I like the presentation of this. Chin up ! I care ! ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
WOW what words could I give the others have not shared......Super....writing Share what you are for you are what you share |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And should you wake, what of then? Waking is not necessarily a wonderful thing... at times, it is more painful than the dream. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful words to match the soul of the poet from wince they came. |
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Theraaven Junior Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 11 |
Wonderful! I hope something comes and gusts the clouds from your heart |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Nan - Thankyou, I do appreciate it! Liz - you are too sweet, and I'm already thinking of the flight (when I'm a rich and famous poet - not a poor student! LOL) Balladeer - come and take the place of all my tutors...I.F.F guy.  Sea - a challenge it would seem. I may just take you up on that... Seward...I don't know, you tell me! A fabulous reply indeed.  Marge - your caring gives me strength at this difficult christmas time. Thankyou. Knight - your wow is gratefully received, thankyou!!! Chris - I know. Ruth - Thankyou my friend. That is a lovely thing to say. Theraaven - Thankyou, one day it will. K[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-12-1999).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
What can I say that hasn't been already said? I hate coming late to the party!  Severn, I've felt this way and more, beautiful thoughts from a wonderful soul The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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