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Awakely sleeping

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Severn
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0 posted 12-11-1999 06:00 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Dreamed

this place
of awakely sleeping

has captured me

who holds the cup
of fate
in a coolly tipping hand?

Choice
is a
slumbering word
flushed red
a dormant beauty
with no reviving kiss

I taste truths
bitter-mouthed
and swallow

so night blinded
the moon is just
a firefly
while
heart-clouded
I sleep
through walking

where is my waking?



[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-11-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
U K Hero
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1 posted 12-11-1999 06:07 AM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

Top notch Severn...
Michael
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2 posted 12-11-1999 06:10 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Great poem, Severn.  What an awesome title, too.  Loved this one.

Michael
Pepper
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Splendid piece Severn....                   

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!


lostboy
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4 posted 12-11-1999 09:56 AM       View Profile for lostboy   Email lostboy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lostboy

Loved this one Severn, very thought provocing.
Denise
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5 posted 12-11-1999 01:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very nice, Severn!  

 Denise


Martie
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6 posted 12-11-1999 03:10 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

"Choice is a slumbering word", wow!  Severn you are so full--you bleed originality.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 12-11-1999 03:26 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
Your wake is in the wooing,
The doing and pursuing.
Enjoyed the poem.
Severn
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8 posted 12-11-1999 05:27 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

UK - beaming smile.  

Michael - glad you could relate!

*S* -  

LB - thanks!

Denise - thankyou too!

Martie - lets hope it doesn't kill me one day - LOL. Thankyou my friend.

Sy - yes, it will take a lot to woo this one.
K
Nan
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9 posted 12-11-1999 06:31 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

"..... the cup of fate/in a coolly tipping hand"
Good stuff, Sev.....
Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 12-11-1999 06:54 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

A poet's poet, that's for sure!
I meant what I said about the invitation!
Liz
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11 posted 12-11-1999 07:11 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Hey, lady! You wanna buy a magazine....or create one? Another A for excellence, Severn.

 To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world.

Seaangel
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12 posted 12-11-1999 10:52 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

Lovely, Severn. Also kinda depressing. Choice is awake, even if only in moments.... I would love to see a contradictory poem about this from you!!
Seward
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13 posted 12-11-1999 11:10 PM       View Profile for Seward   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seward

A fabulous poem.
Perfect wandering material.
But no reviving kiss? Can choice slumber on - even as the words which surround it breathe warmth into it?
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14 posted 12-11-1999 11:43 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Severn -
Quite an awakening here.
You are a remarkable young woman.
I like the presentation of this.
Chin up !
I care !


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

First__Knight
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15 posted 12-11-1999 11:48 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

WOW what words could I give the others have not shared......Super....writing  

 Share what you are for you are what you share

Christopher
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16 posted 12-12-1999 02:57 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

And should you wake, what of then?
Waking is not necessarily a wonderful thing... at times, it is more painful than the dream.
hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 12-12-1999 10:26 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Beautiful words to match the soul of the poet from wince they came.
Theraaven
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18 posted 12-12-1999 03:07 PM       View Profile for Theraaven   Email Theraaven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Theraaven

Wonderful! I hope something comes and gusts the clouds from your heart
Severn
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19 posted 12-12-1999 06:09 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Nan - Thankyou, I do appreciate it!

Liz - you are too sweet, and I'm already thinking of the flight (when I'm a rich and famous poet - not a poor student! LOL)

Balladeer - come and take the place of all my tutors...I.F.F guy.  

Sea - a challenge it would seem. I may just take you up on that...

Seward...I don't know, you tell me! A fabulous reply indeed.  

Marge - your caring gives me strength at this difficult christmas time. Thankyou.

Knight - your wow is gratefully received, thankyou!!!

Chris - I know.

Ruth - Thankyou my friend. That is a lovely thing to say.

Theraaven - Thankyou, one day it will.

  K



[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-12-1999).]
Isis
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20 posted 12-12-1999 06:46 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

What can I say that hasn't been already said?   I hate coming late to the party!  
Severn, I've felt this way and more, beautiful thoughts from a wonderful soul  

 The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

 
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