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Those Last Lingering Moments
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Those Last Lingering Moments |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
'Twas you that gave me my first taste of an innocent, real life. 'Twas you that turned to all your haste, letting go of me, your wife. Once upon a time, you prospered in truth and honesty. Now what you say are only lost words that are painful and icy. After your actions have hurt me, then it is all said and done. Once a real life you had given me- now, I attempt a false one. How do I say that I have failed? Can't I make this alright? How do I tell them I've derailed and still make it through the night? You were expected to be there to muffle all my sorrow. When I am here, you are nowhere, and we won't talk tomorrow. If you continue down your path, your road will part from my own. You'll leave me, bearing my own wrath and I will turn into stone. For those last lingering moments, you'll kiss my cheek, dig my grave. We'll go on with no laments- soon, we'll only have to wave. ©1999 Erin Solari ******************************* Erin has again asked me to post this for her. DE ~onevoice~ "And Something's odd-within- That person that I was- And this One-do not feel the same- Could it be Madness-this?" Emily Dickinson |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
"For those last lingering moments, you'll kiss my cheek, dig my grave." Truly haunting, Erin, and passionately written...I'm glad you are writing more. I've missed your poetry  It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Pixie you know that your writing is excellent so I need not comment on that. You know what I think of the inspiration for this piece as well. I will therefore only say I love you, forever and always.< !signature--> Erin is not yet returned to the forums. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 12-10-1999).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Nice to see you back again Erin. Heart wrenching words, but written so well. Hugs. K |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Erin, this is beautiful and heartfelt. I only pray that things are going well for you. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This was a very well written piece. I know all too well where you are writing from. I feel your pain in these words. |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Beautiful depth of emotion and expression. I am so glad you shared this piece, and thanks, DE for posting it for Erin. I am a Life Purpose Coach who specializes in assisting men and women to clarify their Life Purpose and then in turn live true to their purpose. After 5 years working with the Severely Mentally Ill in County Mental Health, I gave up the bureaucracy (and safe, secure blanket) of this environment to pursue my own purpose and passion. |
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SeaDragon Junior Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 11 |
Time makes us wear different faces, doesn't it? I try to wear my own once a day, if the weather outside is friendly. "Could it be madness - this?" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hauntingly Beautiful One Voice! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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