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Some Advice |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Some Advice Life of dreams denied Shattered though retried From carelessness Found hopelessness Painful path to trod When faithfulness Brings emptiness Turn your back on God For faith is where When love is gone Does the journey end This life to dare In power song Write it out to mend To pen a rhyme Teach dark decline Eek it out in ink To heal takes time This time sublime Speak before you think Old thoughts to purge When past does surge Only face the fore On peace converge ‘Gainst deadly scourge What was there before When this does occur Can you then endure "Of all tyrannies a tyranny sincerely excercised for the good of its victims may be the most oppressive." -C.S. Lewis |
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myslinky Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 27 |
What an exquisite poem! My favorite line is "think before you speak" I can´t remember how many problems I could have avoided if I just gave my words some thought. I loved it.  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very deep my friend. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"When faithfulness brings loneliness ... can you then endure?" Those three lines sum it all up for me -- why cling to what is right when it only ends the same way as wrong, which is so much easier? Excellent thoughts here. Keep exploring this -- "eke it out in ink," as you say. Things will get better, I promise!  --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Your pen "eeked out" a load tonight. Gracious work, my friend. Hope you're feeling better soon...or maybe not - I love your dark poetry, ya know? Michael |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Dark. So dark. Safe there sometimes. Excellent verse. Eek!  |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
When faithfulness brings loneliness... can you then endure? If we but knew the answer to this one Christoher life would be simpler. Or maybe that should have read this way, maybe life would be simpler. I love it. B Gravitt |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Excellent, my friend Liz |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Endure you shall.... Nice job, Christopher.... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Chris I hope you haven't turned your back on God. You will endure this, one day it will get better! Lot of thought you've put here, and I'm glad you did! Loved it! <*\\\>< Jesus is the reason for the season |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wow Chris...this really packs a punch. Great work my friend. |
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Oscar Wilde Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 31San Francisco |
"When this does occur Can you then endure" Your words give me hope. I can endure. Thank you for the inspiration. |
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