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Master
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since 1999-08-18
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0 posted 1999-12-09 10:46 PM


I dream of dreaming that I dreamt
About the master’s masterpiece
Of which, I could not understand
A single theme, a single piece.
I think I thought about a thought
Which headed right out of my head,
And for a second it was caught
Just for a second, then it fled.
And in that second, I remember
Remembering what I had lost,
I even thought that thought surrendered
But it was heading for the coast
To stop that thought, I stopped to think
And lacking thought, I brought it back
Just as the thought began to spring,
The clock alarm had woke me up



 I fell in love and kept on falling

© Copyright 1999 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 1999-12-09 11:12 PM


Some dream! This is so entertaining, Master! I love it!  

 Denise



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2 posted 1999-12-10 12:35 PM


Wow !
You weave a nice dream.
Guess that make you the
Dream Weaver.
Nice, nice job here.


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Severn
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3 posted 1999-12-10 06:01 AM


Lovely play with words, Master.
Master
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4 posted 1999-12-10 09:18 PM


Thanks everybody!
caroline
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5 posted 1999-12-10 09:22 PM


I like I like I like!!!  Love the word play  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


paperguardian
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since 1999-12-07
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6 posted 1999-12-10 10:05 PM


Whoa - what a dream sequence!  This pulls you through the words until you forget that it was a dream.  I especially liked the word repetition, it makes the poem flow beautifully!   Again -- great job!  
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