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Balladeer
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0 posted 1999-12-09 09:47 PM



Arriving from the bar last night,
What strange thing did I see?
A message on the phone that said
My girl was throught with me.

How could she do this thing to me?
I mean, how could she dare?!
I had to show that silly girl
That I just didn't care!

I had to make her feel the pain
Of giving me the air.
I called her up to tell her just
How much I didn't care.

The phone was busy all night long!
It really wasn't fair.
She should have had call waiting so
She'd know I didn't care.

This morning I jumped out of bed
And hurried over there
To prove to her, once and for all,
How much I didn't care.

I stood there on the sidewalk,
Looked completely unaware,
And, when she'd pass, I'd turn away
To show I didn't care.

But she must have left early which
Is really something rare
And so I lost my chance to show
How little that I cared.

No matter. To her job I went.
The guards gave me a stare
And wouldn't let me in to show
Her that I didn't care!

So all day long I waited. Now
My nerves began to wear.
I had to let her know how much
I really didn't care.

Missed her again! This turned into
A horrible nightmare.
Why should it be so hard to show
This girl I didn't care?

So here I am, at midnight,
Bushes tangled in my hair.
This time I have the perfect plan
To show her I don't care.

I'll toss stones at her window so
That she will be aware
That I don't even miss her and
I truly do not care!

Gee! Look at those round, flashing lights!
And what's that bright red glare?
Methinks it's best to wait a bit
To show her I don't care.

I'll return again tomorrow and
I'll end this sad affair.
She'll really feel bad when she
Sees how I just don't care.

© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 1999-12-09 09:53 PM


And the world shall show
dear Balladeer
just how much
it doesn't care

when in that cell
he madly goes
and with lock and key
it's sadly closed!

LOL - nekkid in the bushes this time is it?

K

Betty Gravitt
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2 posted 1999-12-09 09:53 PM


Really Balladeer? I would like to be the one for whom you didn't care.  

Wonderful.


 B Gravitt



Pepper
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3 posted 1999-12-09 09:55 PM


LOL....
Really enjoyed this piece Sir

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!



Nan
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4 posted 1999-12-09 09:57 PM


Isn't this a typical picture of a forsaken heart???.... Is there nothing you can't write about??? That's OK - I'm not jealous..... I Don't Care.....   
Denise
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5 posted 1999-12-09 09:58 PM


I sure wish somebody didn't care that much about me! hehehehehe   Great poem, Balladeer!

 Denise



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6 posted 1999-12-09 10:10 PM


Balladeer -

If you really 'do not care' ...
I have an idea or two
that would put me in a tizzy.
You could try to give me a call
if her line is still busy.

You could take a trip
and into my yard you'd stomp ..
I won't reveal my exact address
but it has something to do with
Green Swamp !

You could drive up the state
and arrive at County Line RV.
Cause there you'd find me working ...
and we'd roll out the red carpet with glee.

Outside my window
I'd even plant a bush ...
if I thought that you
would plant your little tush !

*Having fun with you, as usual.  


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Balladeer
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7 posted 1999-12-09 10:17 PM


Severn.....yep, with vienna sausages in hand.

Betty...what a nice compliment!

Pepper....I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Nan.....YOU DO, TOO!!!!

Denise...I'm sure there are many people who don't care that much about you. (er, did that come out right?) LOL!!

Eloise
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8 posted 1999-12-09 10:24 PM


Great poem!!  You must be tired arriving late from the bar and staying out all night.
RainbowGirl
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9 posted 1999-12-09 10:24 PM


Bal: It's been a long day, but those that care, show it and they continue to show it, because they care...nothing less will do.

HUSG

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...



Balladeer
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10 posted 1999-12-09 10:31 PM


Marge, that would be a real trip! Green swamp???
Soleil
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11 posted 1999-12-09 10:31 PM


Cute. Too cute.
Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 1999-12-09 10:35 PM


Balladeer,
If I didn't care
I'd send a letter in the mail
That is if I really didn't care.
Great poem as usual.

Poet deVine
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13 posted 1999-12-10 12:06 PM


Balladeer you've done it again! This time with a light and dark piece...very good.  

Martie
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14 posted 1999-12-10 12:10 PM


Great job depicting someone who doesn't really care, I mean I could really tell how much they didn't care.  

You do have a talent deer.  I enjoy everything you write.

WhtDove
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15 posted 1999-12-10 12:16 PM


For someone who don't care you sure go through an awful lot of trouble to show it! Great one Balladeer.
Psst...check your spelling and spacing!

Michael
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16 posted 1999-12-10 03:58 AM


Yikes...I gotta an ex who "doesn't care" about just that much.  Never misses a chance to let me know about it.   LOL, good job.


Michael  

Severn
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17 posted 1999-12-10 04:31 AM


Hold on - I ate that in the woods while you were skinny dipping with Marge!
A Romantic Heart
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18 posted 1999-12-10 05:45 AM


This was funny...especially the bushes part in your hair!   hahaha!
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19 posted 1999-12-10 08:16 AM


Ahhhh... so this is how stalkers are created! LOL. They're not obsessed... they're showing they don't care! LOL. Great job... as usual! *G*
Toerag
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20 posted 1999-12-10 08:18 AM


This is so sad Balladeer....I really feel sorry for ya....(I see by your picture that your dog's left ya too?)....Bad day hunh?....Looks as though you're losing weight too?....Sad..sad!...In fact, ya look kinda skinny man?....Ya need to start eating again, forget all these mean women! You need ta gain some weight.....or, stay outta pool halls...cuz if you're leaning against a pool table, someone might try to "chalk" ya?...I hope ya find a true, caring gal soon...(and your dog)....have ya been to the farm lately?
hoot_owl_rn
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21 posted 1999-12-10 10:20 AM


He said he didn't care
But there he was again
Standing by her window
On the outside looking in
His spying's getting worse
Afraid to let her go
But more afraid of what he'll see
At night in her window


[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-10-1999).]

Sunshine
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22 posted 1999-12-10 12:31 PM


Hummm, tune, rambling through my head...

"took a walk outside your house, late last night,
all the shades were pulled and drawn, way down tight,..."

perhaps you were at the wrong house?

Great piece...as always.

paperguardian
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23 posted 1999-12-10 02:39 PM


I don't care about this poem at all... In fact. I don't care so much that I'm going to have to read it again!       Awesome poem!
Andrew Scott
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24 posted 1999-12-10 02:52 PM


Dang-me... Man lost his gal, his dog... next thing ya know it's his truck and then his beer. Alzheimer's must really suck! LOL... another good one Sir Balladeer.  Be well, and remember to always carry ID... we don't want ya gettin' lost now, ya hear.  
Saxoness
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25 posted 1999-12-10 06:24 PM


I waited for your phone call
all that morning you see,
and I saw you standing out there...
not wanting to talk to me.

I heard commotion while at work
but I was crying so hard...
If I'd seen your frantic face,
I'd have stopped the guard.

I saw the flashing lights that night
as I was driving home,
But our neighbor (you know the one)
thought you were a prowler on the roam.

I wanted to say that I was wrong
that I was only scared...
That I love you more than life it's self,
but didn't think you cared.

I realize now that you are gone
because of foolish fears
and now all that I have of you
is a picture stained with tears.
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 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."
                                      
                                 -Charles Brugnot



[This message has been edited by Saxoness (edited 12-10-1999).]

Sally S.
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26 posted 1999-12-11 09:48 AM


I don't care about this poem, not a bit!!  Nope, I don't...uh uh, no way!

  

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