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blewaway5 Junior Member
since 1999-12-09
Posts 10 |
As a distant rumble carries on the breeze the moon begins her slow ascension. A man standing just outside the pale glare of a street light casually drops his cigarette, preparing for what he knows must come. Half a continent away his mind has flown, even as he struggles to bring it home again. With an olympic effort he begins to regain control. At just that moment the distant rumble speaks and a deep, mournful whistle pierces the night's reverie, sending his mind on with wishes of godspeed. The man at first clings to his control, but soon he must succumb. With an incredible swiftness he is there, remembering what used to be. A warm autumn evening punctuated by love's sweet first kiss; a wintery night under a starry canopy holding her in his arms; all of these and more, all set to the haunting sound of a train passing, somewhere, far away. By Stephen |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I like it!!! Welcome to your new home. Robert |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is great... Welcome!  |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I like your poetry! Welcome to passions! |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! Hope you enjoy yourself here. Please, if you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask anyone.  |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
beautiful memories. I like it. B Gravitt |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I like this very much Steven. It is atmespheric and moody--and well done! Welcome to Passions. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Blewaway5, Welcome, I like what you write and you do it well. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
like it too, has great images, welcome |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wonderful. This is richly woven - very expressive and welcome.  [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-09-1999).] |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Ditto, Welcome ! |
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Soleil Member
since 1999-06-12
Posts 113 |
I'm not around often, but it is always nice to check in and find someone like you around and writing. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well, now this seems unanimous to me... |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! This is wonderful! Welcome to Passions, blewaway! Denise |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Truely wonderful. And welcome to passions. If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Stephen - Your poem is excellently done. I was reminded of a black and white movie flickering on the screen ... the silhoutte of the man ... losing himself to remembering. Very nice ... welcome to Passions. ~Marge~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
This was spetacular the second time around =) well at least for this slow poet,i had to get the whole train thing, this is the longest story ive ever read in 25 lines BRAVO The two most waisted things in life are time and potential, I have both and not a clue what to do with them. |
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blewaway5 Junior Member
since 1999-12-09
Posts 10 |
Wow, thanks everyone. I'm not quite sure what else to say. I wasn't expecting everyone to like it. Maybe one or two, but. . . .Thanks. --Stephen |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
A warm welcome to passions....looking forwad to more |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Welcome to Passions! ...And what an entrance! Well done. |
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