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blewaway5
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0 posted 12-09-1999 05:26 PM       View Profile for blewaway5   Email blewaway5   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blewaway5

As a distant rumble carries on the breeze
the moon begins her slow ascension.
A man standing just
outside
the pale glare of a street light casually drops his cigarette,
preparing for what he knows must come.

Half a continent away his mind has flown, even
as he struggles to bring it home
again.
With an olympic effort he begins to
regain control.

At just that moment the distant rumble speaks
and a deep, mournful whistle pierces the night's
reverie,
sending his mind on with wishes of godspeed.
The man at first clings to his control, but soon he must succumb.

With an incredible swiftness he is there,
remembering
what used to be. A warm autumn evening punctuated
by love's sweet first kiss; a wintery night under a starry
canopy holding her in his arms; all of these
and more,
all set to the haunting sound of a train passing,
somewhere,
far away.

By Stephen
© Copyright 1999 blewaway5 - All Rights Reserved
RobertB
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1 posted 12-09-1999 05:29 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

I like it!!! Welcome to your new home.

Robert
suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


2 posted 12-09-1999 05:31 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This is great... Welcome!  
A Romantic Heart
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3 posted 12-09-1999 05:35 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

I like your poetry!

Welcome to passions!
Poet deVine
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4 posted 12-09-1999 05:39 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to the family! Hope you enjoy yourself here. Please, if you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask anyone.  
Betty Gravitt
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5 posted 12-09-1999 05:49 PM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

beautiful memories. I like it.  

 B Gravitt


Martie
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6 posted 12-09-1999 05:58 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I like this very much Steven.  It is atmespheric and moody--and well done!   Welcome to Passions.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 12-09-1999 06:00 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Blewaway5,
Welcome, I like what you write and you do it well.
Iloveit
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8 posted 12-09-1999 06:02 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

like it too, has great images, welcome  
Severn
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9 posted 12-09-1999 06:05 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wonderful.
This is richly woven - very expressive and welcome.

       


[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-09-1999).]
Dr.Moose1
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10 posted 12-09-1999 06:10 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Ditto,
Welcome !
Soleil
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11 posted 12-09-1999 10:27 PM       View Profile for Soleil   Email Soleil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Soleil

I'm not around often, but it is always nice
to check in and find someone like you around and writing.
Nan
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12 posted 12-09-1999 10:38 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Well, now this seems unanimous to me...
Denise
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13 posted 12-09-1999 11:15 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! This is wonderful! Welcome to Passions, blewaway!  

 Denise


Lynn
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14 posted 12-09-1999 11:20 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn


Truely wonderful. And welcome to passions.

 If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~
Marge Tindal
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15 posted 12-10-1999 12:25 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Stephen -
Your poem is excellently done.
I was reminded of a black and white movie flickering on the screen ... the silhoutte of the man ... losing himself to remembering.
Very nice ... welcome to Passions.
~Marge~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Kevin
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16 posted 12-10-1999 12:31 AM       View Profile for Kevin   Email Kevin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kevin

This was spetacular the second time around =)
well at least for this slow poet,i had to get the whole train thing, this is the longest story ive ever read in 25 lines
BRAVO

 The two most waisted things in life are time and potential, I have both and not a clue what to do with them.
blewaway5
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17 posted 12-10-1999 01:57 AM       View Profile for blewaway5   Email blewaway5   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blewaway5

   Wow, thanks everyone.  I'm not quite sure what else to say.  I wasn't expecting everyone to like it.  Maybe one or two, but. . . .Thanks.


--Stephen
hoot_owl_rn
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18 posted 12-10-1999 02:14 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

A warm welcome to passions....looking forwad to more  
Sally S.
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19 posted 12-11-1999 09:53 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Welcome to Passions!  ...And what an entrance!  Well done.
 
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