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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 1999-12-09 07:40 AM


The Day I Stopped Breathing

A toll of bell, an ocean swell
Took away the living breath
The sirens rang, but cherub sang
And paramedic saw not death
Just two days past would be the last
But God said fate would have to wait
He had in mind for me to find
A newborn grandchild in my arms
To woo me with its charms

Elizabeth Santos

© Copyright 1999 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 1999-12-09 07:55 AM


Elizabeth, my friend -

May God fill your arms
with many more grandchildren.
Have a wonderful day, Grandma.


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 1999-12-09 08:08 AM


Elizabeth,
Very nice I like.

jbouder
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3 posted 1999-12-09 01:49 PM


Beautifully written, Elizabeth, and a beautiful sentiment too.

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." -Martin Luther


Martie
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4 posted 1999-12-09 02:00 PM


A new life is so good at breathing new life into the arms that hold.  I'm so glad you have been able to feel this one.
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5 posted 1999-12-09 03:39 PM


I can relate to part of this...welcome to the Grandmother Club.
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6 posted 1999-12-09 04:18 PM


Thank God everything turned out all right, Elizabeth.

 To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world.


Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 1999-12-09 04:36 PM


Thank you all very much for your comments.
Did anyone else ever notice that when you write about something that really happened, others think your imaginative juices are flowing, and when you invent something, all the poets start crying? So let's set the record straight
This poem - true
Flying saucers - true
Touch on the beach - false
Parkinsons - half & half
Poet in tower - Half & half
Buttercups - false
Sunset - True
Thunder - true
Log house - true
Road to Nowhere - true
Got it?  
Now how about the girl on Rt.183?
Liz

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8 posted 1999-12-09 05:09 PM


Elizabeth: I'm always reading the emotion in a poem and believing it to be true, guess it's the art of a good poet to draw you in and ride the storm with you but there was an innocence about this that made me think.."true"...and then I thought.."the pleasures that children give us"...I'll leave you to decide whether i think you were lucky or not..   as for the girl....oh boy!!!!...ROFL

HUGS

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...



Severn
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9 posted 1999-12-09 05:16 PM


Liz

the trials you have seen
are so beautifully
expressed through poetry
and you are inspiration
walking over mountains
and singing words
a living stream of life

Be strong and brave always my friend.

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10 posted 1999-12-09 05:31 PM


I just thought I'd let you know that I like what you wrote.  In not many lines at all you painted a beautiful picture.  

--blewaway5

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11 posted 1999-12-09 05:36 PM


Geez, how many of you all are grandmothers, and here I am not even a mother yet???? So glad you are all right, Elizabeth-we certainly would have missed your poetry!  

 Nail to the mast her holy flag,
Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes


hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 1999-12-09 06:54 PM


Elizabeth, thank goodness for close calls being only that. It would have been a terrible loss to the world to not be graced with your presence or your beautiful words.
Nan
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13 posted 1999-12-10 05:52 PM


This is superb of course........
Someone's counting grandmother's out there?..

JOY 14
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14 posted 1999-12-10 07:16 PM


Congrads on a new grandchild!

And I agree with you on how people will put out so much emotion on poems that don't have personal experience for you.  And on others, that do, they don't as much.
I'm blabbering a bit, so I'll stop.  Just had to agree with you there.

 JOY


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15 posted 1999-12-10 07:22 PM


congratulations!!!!!
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