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The Day I Stopped Breathing

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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 12-09-1999 07:40 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

The Day I Stopped Breathing

A toll of bell, an ocean swell
Took away the living breath
The sirens rang, but cherub sang
And paramedic saw not death
Just two days past would be the last
But God said fate would have to wait
He had in mind for me to find
A newborn grandchild in my arms
To woo me with its charms

Elizabeth Santos
© Copyright 1999 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-09-1999 07:55 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, my friend -

May God fill your arms
with many more grandchildren.
Have a wonderful day, Grandma.


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 12-09-1999 08:08 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
Very nice I like.
jbouder
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3 posted 12-09-1999 01:49 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

Beautifully written, Elizabeth, and a beautiful sentiment too.

 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." -Martin Luther

Martie
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4 posted 12-09-1999 02:00 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

A new life is so good at breathing new life into the arms that hold.  I'm so glad you have been able to feel this one.
Sunshine
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5 posted 12-09-1999 03:39 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I can relate to part of this...welcome to the Grandmother Club.
Balladeer
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6 posted 12-09-1999 04:18 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank God everything turned out all right, Elizabeth.

 To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world.

Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 12-09-1999 04:36 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Thank you all very much for your comments.
Did anyone else ever notice that when you write about something that really happened, others think your imaginative juices are flowing, and when you invent something, all the poets start crying? So let's set the record straight
This poem - true
Flying saucers - true
Touch on the beach - false
Parkinsons - half & half
Poet in tower - Half & half
Buttercups - false
Sunset - True
Thunder - true
Log house - true
Road to Nowhere - true
Got it?  
Now how about the girl on Rt.183?
Liz
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8 posted 12-09-1999 05:09 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Elizabeth: I'm always reading the emotion in a poem and believing it to be true, guess it's the art of a good poet to draw you in and ride the storm with you but there was an innocence about this that made me think.."true"...and then I thought.."the pleasures that children give us"...I'll leave you to decide whether i think you were lucky or not..   as for the girl....oh boy!!!!...ROFL

HUGS

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...


Severn
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9 posted 12-09-1999 05:16 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Liz

the trials you have seen
are so beautifully
expressed through poetry
and you are inspiration
walking over mountains
and singing words
a living stream of life

Be strong and brave always my friend.
blewaway5
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10 posted 12-09-1999 05:31 PM       View Profile for blewaway5   Email blewaway5   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blewaway5

I just thought I'd let you know that I like what you wrote.  In not many lines at all you painted a beautiful picture.  

--blewaway5
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11 posted 12-09-1999 05:36 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Geez, how many of you all are grandmothers, and here I am not even a mother yet???? So glad you are all right, Elizabeth-we certainly would have missed your poetry!  

 Nail to the mast her holy flag,
Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes

hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 12-09-1999 06:54 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Elizabeth, thank goodness for close calls being only that. It would have been a terrible loss to the world to not be graced with your presence or your beautiful words.
Nan
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13 posted 12-10-1999 05:52 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

This is superb of course........
Someone's counting grandmother's out there?..
JOY 14
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14 posted 12-10-1999 07:16 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

Congrads on a new grandchild!

And I agree with you on how people will put out so much emotion on poems that don't have personal experience for you.  And on others, that do, they don't as much.
I'm blabbering a bit, so I'll stop.  Just had to agree with you there.

 JOY

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congratulations!!!!!
 
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