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Betty Gravitt
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Mighty warrior's drum's beat
in the darkness of the night.
A wild thing is caught in flight.

At the net of the trap I pull,
seeking, searching a way to be.
For in my heart I long to see,
the unknown thing set free.

For a lifetime the trap has held.
Against many wild promises,
it has never failed.

The drums of life beat softer still,
a slow warm enchanting beat,
enticing the unknown thing beneath.

The blood rushes through my veins,
I cry out in my pain.
Oh how I long to see,
the unknown thing set free.

I fight hard with all my pride,
against the weakness stealing inside.

I can not loose,
yet I must fail.

Through tear dimmed eyes I see,
a warrior come to guide me.

In my weakness he gives me strength.
In my tears he finds a smile,
together we battle side by side.

Two hearts beating softly in the night,
arms holding each other tight.
On clouds of love we float away,
the unknown has been set free today.


 B Gravitt


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1 posted 12-08-1999 11:10 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Betty -
You touched me with this one.
So very nicely played.
The Warrior's drumbeat ...
sets the wild thing free.
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful !


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Betty Gravitt
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2 posted 12-08-1999 11:16 PM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

Thanks Marge. i just don't know what else to say at this moment, because i've never written any thing like this before. So thanks again.

 B Gravitt


Seaangel
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3 posted 12-08-1999 11:20 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

I feel the longing for freedom clearly in this poem, until of course you fall in love and the unknown thing is freed. (Do you mind me asking what the unknown thing is? I'm not too clear on it.)
I like the poem very much, Betty.
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4 posted 12-08-1999 11:21 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Well, for your first attempt, you certainly did an admirable job, Betty. Keep it up!
Betty Gravitt
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5 posted 12-08-1999 11:42 PM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

I dont mind at all Seaangel. It is the passion of first love. Or at least that is what I was aiming for. Thanks.  

Balladeer you always make me feel as long as I really try I can suceed. Thanks for the feeling.      I needed it tonight.


 B Gravitt


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6 posted 12-09-1999 04:45 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

It's worth the wait Betty.. )

HUGS

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...


Betty Gravitt
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7 posted 12-09-1999 04:51 PM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

Thanks RainbowGirl. I sure hope so, for I'm still waiting.  

 B Gravitt


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