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Seaangel
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0 posted 12-08-1999 03:20 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seaangel

The sky is not solid.
It does not shudder into being
when you finger it.
It is all pores & no skin.
It soaks, drips,
raptures of
heat-intense & thickly streaks
of orange cloud
& day.
It cannot speak.
It is not inert, does not
seek to be obscure
but hangs,
pushes,
weighs through each
atom of air
onto your body.
It stands well back.

The silver-eyed, well-dewed night
pulls in points,
shouldering regard
around stars & drifting clouds.
It bottles your eyes.

Day bursts them;
the blue nothingness entrances.
Well-sucked in, you stare
at open plains of hidden space.
Light bends to distract,
but the opaqueness of this
mist is clear,
& frustrates.
Night is more direct, & dangerous.

The sky is not solid,
but moves with
awareness of your own
fluctuations,
moon to blood, dogs to claws,
nothing which is not
wild or natural.

Speak, sky. You seem
eternally on the edge
of some platform,
dallying from
blue to black.
Speak. Always at first,
it does not matter
what you say.
© Copyright 1999 Angela King - All Rights Reserved
jbouder
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1 posted 12-08-1999 03:24 PM       View Profile for jbouder   Email jbouder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jbouder

This is excellent, SA.  You had better keep writing!  
Severn
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2 posted 12-08-1999 10:33 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

This is one of those poems where I want to own every line, my friend - and I'm sure Mirjam would agree!
Fantastic.
Stunning in its simplicity and serene elegance.

Oh, forgot to give you a  

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-08-1999).]
paperguardian
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3 posted 12-08-1999 10:55 PM       View Profile for paperguardian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paperguardian

  I just want to keep reading this again and again...  Great images in this with a powerful ending!  Your personification is WOW!!!  
WhtDove
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4 posted 12-08-1999 11:32 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I love how you did this! What imagery you've used!

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Jesus is the reason for the season

Seaangel
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5 posted 12-08-1999 11:47 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

Thanks for your comments, guys; I wasn't sure how this one would be taken. It is the first one I've written after several months of a 'dry spell' so it feels good to have this here and above all to see your responses!
Jbouder: I sure as hell will, if you do!
Severn: how flattering, as I'm sure you will agree.
paperguardian: you're pretty WOW! yourself, welcome and I look forward to reading more of your stuff.
Whtdove: Thanks, good to 'meet' you and I'll be looking out for your poetry.
Denise
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6 posted 12-11-1999 03:58 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very very nice, Seaangel! This is beautiful!

 Denise


DreamEvil
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7 posted 12-11-1999 04:59 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Quite a complex poem, yet it looses none of its impact due to that complexity. Very well done.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
                                            DreamEvilŠ
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
                        (Marquis de Sade)



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Martie
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8 posted 12-11-1999 05:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is so full of texture---complex and sensory.  Very well done--keep writing!

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)
caroline
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9 posted 12-12-1999 03:28 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Wow!!  This piece is fantastic. The images you conjure up are stunning. Great work, Sea..and more please!

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain

Seaangel
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10 posted 12-12-1999 04:25 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

dsnyder- thank you
dreamevil- such praise from you is gold.
martie- I will if you will!
caroline- imagery is the life of a poem, yes? I'm glad you enjoyed it.
mirjam
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11 posted 12-14-1999 11:16 PM       View Profile for mirjam   Email mirjam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mirjam

Do i agree with Severn or what!!!  Wow would be my first response.  Definitely sensory, and i love your imagery - you bring things to life with your words, and the way you use them is just incredible.  I'm begging for more too so hopefully your dry spell is gone forever!!!  
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12 posted 01-27-2007 12:44 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Angela~
Hoping to bring you 'home' for a visit~
It's been much too long since you've been here and I'm wanting to know just how you are and what you're doing~

AND ... I'm gonna email you !!

Drop in .. okay ?
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~


~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Artic Wind
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13 posted 11-12-2007 07:17 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed angela

ARCTIC WIND
 
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