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paperguardian
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0 posted 12-08-1999 11:16 AM       View Profile for paperguardian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paperguardian


If I could,
     dare seize the pain
     see its rearing head and never flinch
             extract it, show you

     how on the grander side of nothing
     aches a throbbing something
I wouldn't.

It is hope,
     the terrifying inspiration whispering
     a poison promise
             of tomorrow, already breathing,

     bearing emptiness
     that I will measure out in
one life.
© Copyright 1999 paperguardian - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 12-08-1999 11:33 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Sometimes we take life one day at a time... other times, we must use smaller measures. I like your thoughts on pain and hope. *S* Welcome to Passions!!!
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 12-08-1999 11:37 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Paper
If I could I wouldn't
If I wouldn't I could.
I think I understood.
Enjoyed the read.
RainbowGirl
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3 posted 12-08-1999 11:47 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Much food for thought here..

HUGS

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...



[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 12-08-1999).]
Iloveit
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4 posted 12-08-1999 12:13 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

like this too, very well done, welcome  
Sally S.
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5 posted 12-08-1999 12:19 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

I'm going to go WAY out here and ask if the way you present this is to represent a snake? (or something close to that.) I've been trying to connect the two...the "siezing pain, the rearing head, never flinch,poison"  etc...
Am I way off?  
Sven
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6 posted 12-08-1999 12:34 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Very good, my friend. . . welcome. . .perhaps you should also look at Dark Passions. . . some of your writing may fit with that also. . .

Very well done. . . I like the use of spacing. . .gives an impression. . .

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Severn
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7 posted 12-08-1999 02:56 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Welcome to Passions!  

Excellent verse here. Love the format.
paperguardian
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8 posted 12-08-1999 03:12 PM       View Profile for paperguardian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paperguardian

  Thanks for your comments and encouragement!  You guys sure make people feel welcome!  Its great to have someone to share with... glad people finally understood my ramblings!     
   Sally S.--- you are right.. the snake idea is there!  (just not as effective in the format   )
   Sven ---- Thanks - I'll check out Dark Passions!
   Everyone - Thanks again for the encouragement!  Glad to be here and have the opportunity to read your work and share some of mine!
Echo Rhayne
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9 posted 12-08-1999 05:33 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Welcome to passions.  Great poem and I love the way you used the format of a snake to go along with it.  Once again, welcome!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


Poet deVine
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10 posted 12-08-1999 07:37 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to the family! Quite an impressive entrance! I look forward to reading more from you!  
Denise
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11 posted 12-09-1999 12:18 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well done, paperguardian! Very original format!

 Denise


WhtDove
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12 posted 12-19-1999 09:35 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I picked that up, the way you made the words slither around like a snake would do. Very unique. I liked this!  And Welcome!
FreeByrd
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13 posted 12-20-1999 03:13 PM       View Profile for FreeByrd   Email FreeByrd   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit FreeByrd's Home Page   View IP for FreeByrd

PG,

Like this piece very much. Well written.

This one belongs over in Dark Passions. Stop over and take a look sometime.

Looking forward to more.

-RS

 There must be some kinda way out of here... say the joker to the thief

There's to much confusion, I can't get no relief

- Hendrix


hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 12-20-1999 07:04 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Welcome to passions  
Elizabeth Santos
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15 posted 12-20-1999 07:26 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Hey, I like your work very much!
Quite talented you are!
Liz
caroline
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16 posted 12-20-1999 07:34 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Excellent! Welcome to Passions!  

 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain


 
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