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An Unfortunate Soul

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Eloise
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0 posted 12-07-1999 09:41 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Eloise

As I sat and watched the disheveled man
I wondered just where his troubles began.
With age on his face, he looked tired and haggard.
His shoes were worn and his clothes were tattered.

All that he owned was on his back,
Tucked inside a ragged backpack.
As he shuffled along people would stop and stare.
But, he kept moving on, he didn't seem to care.

What brought him to where he is today?
Where is his family?  What would they say?
Does he have a home?
Or is he turly alone?

As he sits himself down and stares into space,
You can see the confusion upon his face.
His anguished cries go unheard,
As he ponders and never says a word.

There are others around him also dressed in rags.
With all their worldly possessions stuffed into torn bags.
They offer their hand and try to talk with him.
But, he doesn't even seem to notice them.

Alone in a corner he huddles at night
Until darkness gently fades into morning light.
Then once again he marches down that lonely road
Carrying with him his heavy load.

An abandoned soul dwelling in a broken shell.
Living in his own private hell.
I wonder, when he finally reaches his end,
Will he be alone, or will he have a friend?

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 12-07-1999 09:51 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Eloise,
Some good paint and some wonderful lines.
Denise
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2 posted 12-07-1999 10:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Eloise, this is an excellent piece of writing! You are quite talented!
I also have wondered about these poor homeless ones. Breaks my heart. Thanks for this wonderful piece!  


 Denise


WhtDove
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3 posted 12-07-1999 10:44 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Very good! We all have One, no matter how alone we think we really are. That's God!
First__Knight
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4 posted 12-07-1999 10:48 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

What a wondrful poem... I met a man such as this...He choose this type of life and worked to buy bibles and food.  He made is way from place to place and gave the bibles to those you he felt needed them.  He walked for the Lord

 Share what you are for you are what you share



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5 posted 12-07-1999 10:57 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

There are many that do live like this. You portrayed it very well, Eloise.

 To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world.

Tara Simms
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6 posted 12-07-1999 11:04 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Beautiful exploration into the plight of the homeless.  
Eloise
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7 posted 12-07-1999 11:38 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Thanks to all of you for reading and your comments.  I was driving down the road one day and saw a homeless gentleman just walking down the road with a pack on his back and gave me the inspiration for this piece.  You're right WhtDove we all have at least one friend out there.  Thanks Denise for the boost.    
Severn
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8 posted 12-08-1999 05:42 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I don't see many homeless people in NZ, but when I do I wonder about their stories...
Well done, Eloise.
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