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Wish Upon A Star

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Eloise
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0 posted 12-06-1999 04:10 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Eloise

On a quiet enchanted evening,
Long ago, but not so far.
Magically, you came to me
From a wish upon a star.

That night the star fell from the sky,
I wished for someone just for fun.
Not expecting much, but you came along.
And a new life for me had just begun.

They say that once in a lifetime,
True love will come around.
And I was so sure
That was what I had found.

But now you say you're leaving.
I just don't understand.
It's hard to build a castle,
When the bricks are made of sand.
© Copyright 1999 Eloise - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-06-1999 04:15 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Amen! Those sand bricks disappear at the first tide. *S* Well done!
Pepper
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2 posted 12-06-1999 04:58 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Very well written piece ....!!
Like this much Eloise.......

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!


Severn
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3 posted 12-06-1999 05:22 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Ah yes - been there.

Touching words Eloise.
Denise
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4 posted 12-06-1999 09:52 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A very sad yet beautiful, poem, Eloise. I enjoyed this.

 Denise


Tara Simms
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5 posted 12-06-1999 10:39 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms


Beautiful poem.  I especially loved the ending about your castle made of sand.
Eloise
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6 posted 12-06-1999 10:52 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Thanks suthern, Pepper, Severn, Denise and Tara for reading and commenting.  Yes they do wash away with the tide. But we always go back in search of building once again.
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7 posted 12-06-1999 10:55 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Good message, Eloise. We need better bricks.
 
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