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Seaangel
Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand

0 posted 1999-12-06 04:04 PM


how could I say
there was
anything of flow & form
I knew so much? Your
impenetrable sulkiness I
have felt
this dawn & more.
you know it I
             owe
         it all to you &
the lightbulb
would not
blink
     without you

& how I love you so
  much I
        have
taken you at pen-point
under it you

take shape from my dreams
& chestache seems
peculiarly folded
against you

the brittle night
snapped shadow & light
warm music blurs
under the influence.

I am drunk with you.

© Copyright 1999 Angela King - All Rights Reserved
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

1 posted 1999-12-06 05:20 PM


Sea has just this minute said as she stands over my shoulder 'I'm not completely happy with this...'
WELL!
I am!
I love this, I love your style.

And since I know you like them

                

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

2 posted 1999-12-06 09:55 PM


I love this too!
:


 Denise



Seaangel
Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand
3 posted 1999-12-06 11:25 PM


thanks, Severn, D, I only wanted to change the last 2 lines because I thought it was a little cliched, but you have set my heart at rest.

And thank you for the rolling smilies, aren't they so cool?!?!?





(And I promise to restrict myself to only one per message after this, but I had to go all out just once!)

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