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Lucie
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25 posted 12-05-1999 10:03 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

I don't know what made me
take this lover to our bed.
Perhaps it was your distance
and the cruel things you have said.

The late nights you spent working
and your weekends on the course.
The way you turned your back in bed
is what led us towards divorce.

I waited and I watched you
hoping you would realize.
That our marriage was in jeopardy
you could have seen it in my eyes.

I know that there is no exuse
to step outside our vows.
But there is only so much
that a lonely heart allows.

I'm sorry that I hurt you
but you have hurt me more.
Instead of watching from the bushes
you could have looked at me .... before.
Julie
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26 posted 12-05-1999 10:34 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Like everyone else I am speechless...totally awesome.
Severn
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27 posted 12-05-1999 10:41 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wow - so THAT's what you look like!
Nice dog.

PhaerieChild
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28 posted 12-06-1999 05:26 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

And once again you astound me. Love the twist at the end.  

 If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


Nan
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29 posted 12-06-1999 07:56 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Geesh, M&M - I knew I could count on you to put an appropriate and meaningful twist at the end.... It sure is a tough one for any one (either sex) who's been there - Nice work, Deer....
suthern
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30 posted 12-06-1999 08:15 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I don't think my sanity would have lasted through watching... one glimpse was more than enough... and your poem brings back some of those long ago tears. It's superb, 'Deer one... with all the new graphics, I can't access the forum from home anymore... but this was worth the wait!

Lucie: Great reply!!

[This message has been edited by suthern (edited 12-06-1999).]
Sally S.
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31 posted 12-06-1999 09:12 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Well, I was totally caught off guard! You'd think I'd be used to your twists and turns...not this time!!  My reaction??  I jumped a bit out of my seat and said "Whoa!" That says it all, my dear.  
Iloveit
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32 posted 12-06-1999 09:27 AM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

yep, like suthern says, painfully beautiful...sigh
hoot_owl_rn
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33 posted 12-06-1999 09:37 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow........I am in awe...wonderfully written

And Lucie...what a comeback  
Toerag
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Ala bam a


34 posted 12-06-1999 03:23 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

And then after he threw the ring,
And noticed the room's decor,
He apologized quite innocently,
Cuz it was the house next store.

Though he'd often peeped into this room,
So many times before,
This certainly was the first time,
He'd run in through the door.

Now the neighbors all knew Balladeer,
He'd been peeping all 'round town,
And they'd noticed him quite often,
But knew he wasn't "sound".

So later on that evening,
While explaining to the "law"
He said he was just mistaken,
He had the address wrong.

Now these days he only peeps,
Into the cells adjoining,
Watching the other inmates,
Read their Playboys and only moaning.

suthern
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35 posted 12-06-1999 03:32 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

And now my tears are ones of laughter! LOL. Thanks for that update, Toe! *G*
Toerag
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Ala bam a


36 posted 12-06-1999 03:40 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

By the way....damn fine looking dog. What the hell's that other thing?....It's kinda like when Balladeer walked into a bar with a parrot on his shoulder. The bartender said: "What in the world is that?"...The parrot said, "It's a poet....I got it over in Passions in Poetry".....they got thousands of them over there"......
Balladeer
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37 posted 12-06-1999 03:41 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

...and I hate it when that happens, Toe, yanno?  
(Excellent comeback, you dog)


For you other SERIOUS and RESPECTABLE poets, thank you very much for your kind comments!
Toerag
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Ala bam a


38 posted 12-06-1999 03:49 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Okay...The poem was just magnificient..laddie laddie....very unpredictable ending...blah blah, thought provoking....yea, yea...great content, rhyme etc....laddie laddie....fine work...from a great poet....yea...sad too...okay....and as usual...another damn masterpiece....but who here would have expected less from you?....Geesch.....It's like typing a "form letter" with everything you write?.....I hate you yanno?....You get all this praise etc., and I get comments from you?.....LOL...Seriously though my friend...you are a genius yanno?......Have ya ever eaten eagle?
Martie
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39 posted 12-06-1999 04:00 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I just had to add my (loud clapping) to all the above.  How about a short story?--you are so good at tale-spinning.  I know you must have a few under your belt.
Alicat
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since 05-23-99
Posts 4277
Coastal Texas


40 posted 12-06-1999 04:32 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Yanno...I really don't know which I prefer...the well-crafted words of an inspired Balladeer, or the swift and punny repartee betwixt him and his feet..um..Toes.


Alicat the persnikitty

 As I sit here dimly thinking
Watching modem lights a-blinking
Churning out poetic hash.
Lord, in all Your piety,
Help me keep my sanity:
Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat

Andrew Scott
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since 06-24-99
Posts 2655
Redlands,CA,USA


41 posted 12-06-1999 05:30 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Sir Balladeer: Once again my friend I must bow to you and yours... I echo all the above and applaud a tale well told. I also liked Toe addition  

Side Note: My wife complains of arthritis in her right hand, brought on from the time she broke it across her boyfriends jaw when she found him in bed with someone else.  The cops say she won the fight two-to-one: her broken hand vs. his broken jaw and the other woman's arm.  She says the arthritis is worth it.  Boy do I love that woman!  Again… an excellent offering.
Elizabeth
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America the beautiful


42 posted 11-25-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Moving this into my library.

Elizabeth
Lisann
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43 posted 08-03-2001 11:40 PM       View Profile for Lisann   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lisann

This is an amazing piece Balladeer.  However,  I noticed that not one person really commented on the fact that this was written from a sheer  heartbreaking experience and I am so sorry You had to go through this.  I feel for you~~~~really I do.  And no,  Not all women are like this.  I am very faithful to my husband.  He is my one and only.
 
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