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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 1999-12-04 09:16 PM


For Liz a little bit of Hyde.


Commitment

The tongue of a bell strikes the shell.
The shell cries out a double tell.
The pressure swells and circles fly,
To infinity the cry.

Vibrations we think as frail,
Forever and ever wail.
Nirvana within the core,
Touches and tastes every shore.

Torment of a sensuous soul,
Lays the scars inside the goal.
Doubt makes for shady mortar.
Apocalypse, has no quarter.

Garrotted are the thoughts instead,
Promised when the chalice bled.
Holy vows and oaths they swore,
Toast of hemlocks, evermore.

She, the tongue that struck the shell,
And I, the wrung and tolling bell.


© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Ohme
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1 posted 1999-12-04 09:19 PM


Very nice. I like this one a lot.
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 1999-12-04 10:16 PM


Mr. Hyde,

Does this mean you can't write passionate poetry? Please don't ever stop doing that or our hearts will suffocate!
Forget Jekell and Hyde, lets go back to Cain. He's the man!
Liz

Severn
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3 posted 1999-12-04 10:41 PM


Well - just as long you as you are a tolling bell of poetry Sy, I have no complaints!
Elizabeth
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4 posted 1999-12-04 10:48 PM


I agree with Severn!!!
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 1999-12-05 08:46 AM


Ohme,
Thank you so much, that is all I was looking for.
Liz,
I just sort of liked that poem.
Severn,
It's all just poetry some nice, some not so nice, love you all.

Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 1999-12-05 08:52 AM


Sy,
I like it ,too - lots!
Liz

Seaangel
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7 posted 1999-12-05 04:03 PM


A beautiful and crisp depiction of committed love.  Lotsa envy, Sy.
Severn
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8 posted 1999-12-05 04:07 PM


(My friend Sea has convinced me to do this in a nice pretty colour just for you Sy. Isn't this great?!)
Oh - and whaddya mean 'It's all just poetry'!!!? Tch tch - poetry is life! Breath! Hang on...getting carried away, but you know what I mean. K

Denise
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9 posted 1999-12-05 04:24 PM


No relationship can survive without committment! Another beautiful poem, Seymour!

I love all these new options too!  


 Denise


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